Many people want to protect and improve the natural environment Which ONE of the following three actions is MOST useful for individuals to do in their daily lives if they want to help the environment Why Walking or bicycling instead of driving a car to wo

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Many people want to protect and improve the natural environment. Which ONE of the following three actions is MOST useful for individuals to do in their daily lives if they want to help the environment? Why?

-Walking or bicycling instead of driving a car to work or school
-Recycling and reusing objects instead of throwing them in the trash (rubbish) can
-Buying locally grown, organic foods (grown without pesticides)

Some people believe that walking or bicycling to work or school is the best way to improve the ecological condition for an individual. Others claim that recycling and reusing objects is the most favorable method. Still, others maintain that buying locally grown, organic food is the most useful method. As far as I am concerned, I maintain that

To begin with, stop wasting too much resource is a judicious approach to preserve our environment, and walking or bicycling to work or school can undoubtedly prevents people from wasting unnecessary resources. For example, if people ride a bicycle to school, they would not consume any gasoline or diesel fuel on a regular basis because bikes require no petroleum to motivate. In addition, cars were usually equipped with an air conditioner, which requires batteries. Thus, an individuals could save a significant amount of electricity each day by walking to school instead of driving. In other words, if more and more people decided to spend fewer resources, we could undoubtedly prevent our mother nature from being depleted by civilization. On the other hand, I once tried to recycle plastic bottles and cans to protect our nature, but I realized that the industry already wasted too much electricity, water, and energy to produce plastics. That is, our environmental condition will not be improved through reusing palstics because lots of energy and resources were used to produce recyclable materials in the first place.

In addition, in order to protect the ecology, an individual must not do activities that might accidentally damage the environment. However, purchasing locally grown, organic food might ironically destroy the environment to some extent. For example, my mother tried to improve the environment via purchasing organic food grown in the Hualien County and the Taitung County. Nevertheless, most organic food from Taiwan were grown on high attitude hills or mountains. To elaborate, since farmers need to cultivate mountain areas to grow organic vegetables, purchasing organic food still disturb the nature. As a result, buying locally grown vegetables and fruit could not help people preserve the natural environment. On the contrary, many researchers around the world have proven that walking to school every day can save the environment because the amount of carbon dioxide and methane emitted will be reduced. Hence, walking to school or work can unquestionably protect the environment because such an idea is backed by scientists all around the world.

In conclusion, I maintain that walking to school or bicycling to work is the most advisable method for an individual to preserve our environment, considering the aforementioned reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'prevent'
Suggestion: prevent
...cling to work or school can undoubtedly prevents people from wasting unnecessary resourc...
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Line 3, column 475, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...tioner, which requires batteries. Thus, an individuals could save a significant amount of elec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35747663551 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88103250306 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532710280374 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0713807519 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.684210526 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5263157895 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196548896741 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617514755993 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318509491053 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121814179643 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147575419275 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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