Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves.
It is critically important that students thrive in all aspects of life as this will portray them a responsible products of their instructors. Personally, I believe that the mandate of education will be fulfilled when teachers impact knowledge such that students can further broaden their horizons with little or no dependence on their instructors. There are two reasons why I feel this way which i will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, showing students the way to self education will enhance further study and as a result, it will take little or no time before they become professionals in thier respective endeavors. My personal experience is a compelling example to illustrate this point. During my first year of study in the university, I was introduced to several interesting courses in Mining Engineering. I found those course very fascinating probably because of the method my lecturers adopted in teaching us. Infact, after the first semester examination, I had no iota of doubt in scoring more than seventy five percent in certain subjects. However, as I progress into higher levels, things became almost frustrating. Most courses were anchored by department faculties who were avid researchers. Their methods of teaching were unlike my first year of study. I took a course particularly in Rock Mechanics which requires fundamental knowledge of FLAC software. After Professor Charles introduced us to the general outline of the subject, I needed no one to persuade me that I have to bolster my understanding of numerical analysis - a course which I undertook during my first year. This was because understanding of numerical analysis would be cardinal to scoring an A in Rock Mechanics. So, I quickly brushed over the course materials and as I was studying, I began to unravel certain complexities which were beyond what I was taught at first. Eventually, I mastered FLAC software well enough that I easily aced Rock Mechanics examination. This would not have been possible if my lecturer had not instructed us in such a way that I needed to study deeper.
Furthermore, teaching people to educate themselves will make them develop a sense of responsibility and become independent. For instance, upon completion of my studies, I got a high paying job to a construction company. My role as an engineer in the company necessitated that I am proficient in using AutoCAD. I never had a prior knowledge of this software. My boss only helped me to install the software. I took up the responsibilities of studying everyday and watching YouTube tutorials to fully understand the use of AutoCAD. By dint of assiduous study and constant practice, I became very proficient in the software such that I could apply the knowledge in building construction. Had my boss satisfied me with every knowledge I needed to learn the skill, I may not have been responsible enough to learn independently.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that teaching people to further educate themselves would fulfill the mandatory goal of education. This is because self education will enhance deeper study and give every student a sense of diligence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2632.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1306042885 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07213413533 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520467836257 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 843.3 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2802460508 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4814814815 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120118083524 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327072016111 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601653308717 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103110776443 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693628929619 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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