Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for the government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds
It is critically important that the government contribute tremendously to the development of the society. As this will connote a responsible leadership that is concerned with people's well-being. Personally, I believe that more resources should be diverted by the government into fostering recreational facilities. There are two reasons why I feel this way which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, recreational centers like swimming pool and playgrounds help to enhance people's mental health and give them psychological balance. When an individual have access to pleasure giving areas within the society, soon he may find an elixir to mental and emotional trauma. My personal experience is a compelling example to illustrate this point. About three years ago, my neighbor - Madam Jane's only son was involved in a ghastly accident on his way to Lagos. This brutal occurrence eventually claimed his life. When the news was brought to madam Jane, the sixty years old widow could not help but cry like a baby. The shock on her gradually brought her into a partial stroke. She became emotionally disordered too. Oftentimes, my dad would drive her out to the beach, the park, and recreational centers. Although, it took a while before Madam Jane could regain her sanity but the availability of such nice places eventually enhanced Madam Jane's mental health. If such pleasurable parks were not available, she could probably have died of emotional disorder.
Furthermore, places like swimming pool and playgrounds are meant to serve not just an individual but also a family. Siblings can find it easy to foster their relationship by paying a visit to recreational centers. For instance, when I was ten years old. I had already became familiar with swimming pools. I grew up learning how Dad, Mum, and siblings would drive to playgrounds most especially on weekends. Those moments were so exciting and full of fun and a strong family bond was established among us. Although, there are several occasions when Dad and Mum would have misunderstanding. However, they outrightly to forget about any grudge as soon as we set on our usual weekend picnic to the pool. This example clearly demonstrate how recreational facilities can help foster love among family members.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that government should rather spend more resources on pleasurable parks as this would improve people's mental health and also upscale love within the families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...usly to the development of the society. As this will connote a responsible leaders...
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Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...when I was ten years old. I had already became familiar with swimming pools. I grew up...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22110552764 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89514584445 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585427135678 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1874977798 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.12 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.92 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144760224397 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367239508918 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387792825167 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897734895941 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259999569777 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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