Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for the government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for the government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds.

Without a shadow of a doubt, The governments' funds management plays such a pivotal role in channeling people to specific activities that substantially influence their lives. An unanswered question in this area is, what kind of realms the government should support, field engaged with either physical activities or artistic concepts. Despite arguments asserting that merely spending money on art museums and concert halls is of greater importance, I believe otherwise, maintaining that the government's financial support for recreational facilities is a more efficient approach to fund. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.

First and foremost, in this given hectic life, the government should furnish people with various opportunities to help them dilute their exhaustion and tension. In other words, reducing the concentration on workplaces' or schools' occupations and alleviating destructive thoughts in peoples' leisure time can readily be done by energetic activities, such as swimming, or taking children to a playground and playing with them. In addition, after spending a great time working in an office or a school, compensating the weariness with outdoor action is much more effective in heightening energetic level than wandering along with an art museum. For instance, for weekend plans, a family consisting of children who go to school and parents who are occupied with their occupations would go and spend their time in an outdoor park with a playground rather than attending a concert. As it is evident, the tremendous influence of such outdoor activities is more magnificent than museums owing to its different nature from indoor places. As a result, the better choice for the government is spending its money on improving recreational facilities.

Another reason to be mentioned is that developing the entertainment infrastructure in a country seeds the plants of a healthier dominant lifestyle because of the possibilities it provides for people, especially juveniles. As a matter of fact, when people, especially children, have other choices than staying at home and playing with their various gadgets, such as going for a swim in a nearby pool or working out with a sporting apparatus, they will choose them. Therefore, putting more effort into enhancing recreational facilities sets on more individuals involved with sports, yet, focusing on improving the art museums has nothing to do with peoples' activity or healthcare. My experience is a compelling example of this. After a big gym comprised of a pool was built near our house, I started my daily swimming, which led me to a better shape and a healthier lifestyle.

Reflecting all reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that it is expedient for the government's money is to be spent on recreational equipment on the grounds that, first, it helps reducing anxiety levels and also change the predominant environment people spend their time on, second, it increases sports activities and brings about healthier lives.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...n realizes that it is expedient for the governments money is to be spent on recreational eq...
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Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to reduce' or 'reduce'.
Suggestion: to reduce; reduce
...nt on the grounds that, first, it helps reducing anxiety levels and also change the pred...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2580.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42016806723 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05954488678 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567226890756 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.1417874744 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.25 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.75 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336393784202 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993088615518 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807292724383 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188252041682 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603366907137 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.75 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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