ome people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Without a shadow of a doubt, individuals' dominant lifestyles are tremendously engaged with social networks. In fact, a substantial amount of time is spent on varied social networking applications. An unanswered question in this area is whether to keep records of personal experiences, including photos or other data, by posting them on these social networks. Despite all the arguments asserting that retaining these records and watching them a couple of years later can be pleasant, I believe otherwise, maintaining that publicizing such personal pieces of information can have dangerous repercussions in a myriad of facets. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, sharing private information in social networks, which teems with assorted attitudes and personalities, can have disruptive ramifications on one's reputation, not to mention occupation and personal life. In other words, there are people in these social networks eager to take advantage of such data either by spreading false rumors or changing the data in order to use them in corruptive contexts. These data can make one get fired from their careers or universities. Therefore, not uploading private information precludes these dangerous people exert it against their wills. Moreover, there are seldom situations in which an individual does not want certain people to find out their personal life occasions, yet, due to social network's nature, the diffusion of data is inevitable. My friend's experience is an eye-opening example. Back at high school, I remember she posted a photo of her family and turned out it had security problems due to her uncle, a well-known politician, and was apprehended because of the illusion of sharing private data in the long run.
Another reason worthwhile to mention is that constantly taking photos and videos to keep them as memories might seize the joy of that moments. To put it more simply, during a trip there are hilarious and beautiful moments that may not be felt due to intently recording them instead of enjoying them. Although all the pictures and memories of that trip will be conserved for a long time, the sheer joys of those moments, which might never recur, would be sacrificed. For example, a friend of mine always takes pictures and edits them while we hang out and starts posting them on Instagram. On the other hand, everyone else takes advantage of the ongoing moments and appreciates our aggregation, which is more delightful than working with a cellphone and missing all those happiness.
Reflecting upon all reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that the disadvantages of not creating records on social media are infinitesimal when compared to its advantages. This is because not only has publicizing personal information privacy issues, but also it prevents enjoying moments due to being occupied by taking pictures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...riences, including photos or other data, by posting them on these social networks...
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Line 5, column 548, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_OUR_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'our'?
Suggestion: our
...s pictures and edits them while we hang out and starts posting them on Instagram. O...
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Line 5, column 766, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this happiness' or 'those happinesses'?
Suggestion: this happiness; those happinesses
...orking with a cellphone and missing all those happiness. Reflecting upon all reasons mention...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in fact, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2475.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33405172414 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93159144683 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571120689655 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7135485823 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.263157895 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198762718784 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057301881414 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448516961971 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111185719005 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396713892041 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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