Some people believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. Others believe that children are protected too much by their parents. Which of these statements do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your decision.
It is critically important that parents exhibit due care about their children and ensure they secure a bright future. Personally, I believe that nowadays, young ones are too free and almost independent unlike time past. There are two reasons why I feel this way which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is not uncommon to say that parents enforce less authority on their children these days that the young folks are almost becoming indisciplined. In the name of allowing children to enjoy freedom of expression, parents have left their wards to become disrespectful. My personal experience with young boy is a compelling example to illustrate this point. About three years ago, I was hired to prepare a young boy named Sam for his entrance examination into the high school. Normally, the home lesson supposed to be held at my place or a coaching center, but in order to relieve sam's parent of the stress of coming to my house everyday, I decided to be going to their own place. On several occasions, I had witnessed Sam uttered insulting words to his mum when he was denied of certain goodies or the other. I would try to chastise him but sam's mum would as well indirectly disallow me. She wouldn't want to beat this little boy as well. Infact, sam had just returned from school on a particular day, I was already waiting for him to begin the home lesson. So his mum wanted sam to complete the short tutorial before eating. The young boy muttered angrily, crying, and beating his mum at the same time. This example clearly demonstrate how indisciplined Sam was just because he was given too much freedom.
Furthermore, the high level of freedom enjoyed by young ones have birthed a more corrupt society. It is not surprising to say that most of the evil acts in today's community were perpetrated by young ones. For instance, two months ago, I read a headline news from the Nigeria's punch. It was so disheartening to learn about three primary school boys and girls caught in the very act of sex. I thought to myself that, for children of seven years old to be having sex, they must have gotten the ideas from somewhere. Perhaps by watching pornographic movies at home as their parents "allow them to be free". Had there not been this level of freedom given by parents to their wards, our society could not have become so engrossed with infidelities.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. This is because parents have enforced little discipline and obviously, a lot of evil acts are common among young ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (sams) must be used with a third-person verb: 'parents'.
Suggestion: parents
...ng center, but in order to relieve sams parent of the stress of coming to my house eve...
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Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ent of the stress of coming to my house everyday, I decided to be going to their own pla...
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Line 3, column 906, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...uld as well indirectly disallow me. She wouldnt want to beat this little boy as well. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76444444444 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59868532764 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551111111111 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5646382664 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3333333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215000889294 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637948473094 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916139880192 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161479767643 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650846734274 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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