Some people believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. Others believe that children
are protected too much by their parents. Which of these statements do you agree with? Use specific
reasons and examples to support your decision.
There are many different ways how parents bring up their children and mostly they emulate practices form ancestors. No matter of the practice, the main goal at the end is to see their kid well-adjusted. I personally believe that nowadays children have more freedom than in the past and I will explain why is like that in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, the government system of democracy allowed many things and gave freedom to many teenagers. They are free to take their own decisions regarding private and professional issues and the authoritarian way of upbringing is no longer accepted in modern families. Parents give all possible things to their children as they try to make them happy and lacked them nothing. By giving all choices to do whatever they want or go everywhere, parents consider this way as a successful, because the kid would be satisfied and won't do things out of spite. However, parents are not inclined to be lenient as that will have perhaps negative effect. In fact they use auspicious methods to raise their kid. For example, as we all know in every family there are some problems and hassles and parents try to avoid demonstrations of such problems in front of their children. No one can deny that would affect badly children and would lead them to rebellion or resentments. This in turn can have even stronger effect in the future and give the birth of juvenile delinquency.
Furthermore, the labor market has provided many opportunities to young people, even for adolescents. Lately, children are enticed of finding a job and earn their allowance. Consequently, that will give them sort of independence and freedom. Years ago when the financial crisis had engrossed the world job offers were meager and kids were strictly dependent of their single-parent families or siblings for some economic aid. Moreover, the economic crisis had encouraged many people to abandon their infants due to inability to subsist. And these babies were taken by the supervision of foster families which can take care of them and later on adopted officially.
To sum up with, I definitely believe that children nowadays have more freedom than before due to the governmental alteration that made shifts to democracy and the broader range of job offers on the labor market, in spite of the youngsters' age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, for example, in fact, sort of, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99228791774 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7681589168 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557840616967 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7606079614 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.210526316 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216917210949 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620857895336 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420744387204 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136500384462 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260482870126 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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