In some countries, teenagers have jobs while still they are students. Do you think this a good idea? Support your opinions by using specific reasons and details.
Sufficient knowledge would help people to facilitate their requirements. In this era, most people try to learn many majors albeit they accept to pay money for their expectation. Seeking the knowledge requires attention and individuals who are eager to learn; they should allocate all their time to achieve their goals. Therefore, I don’t subscribe the theory that states having a job is good for student who are still students at schools or universities. I have two supportive reasons exploring in subsequent essay.
To begin with, students need sufficient time to fulfill their job as well; nevertheless, they would not attain suitable consequences at school or university. For instance, when students enroll for a new class, they necessitate to distribute a distinct time for studying the lessons they have subsequently achieved after class; otherwise, they will face to keen troubles such as forgetting the important details of a lesson. My own experience is a compelling example like this. Once upon a time, when I was at university, I applied for a part time job and successfully got the tenure. It was hard to me to review the lectures I had learnt at university because after the college, I had to directly go to job. Thus, I had no enough time to revise the lessons of university, and on the other hand, working with stress was so unpleasant to me while I was at job. As a general rule, students cannot be as successful as they wish while they have a part-time job and partly works would not let them keep studying as well.
Secondly, students require physical and mental energy to enhance their activities. Most students who apply for a job to afford their financial needs, they would not take care of education because they spend most of their energies at work, and studying after an exhaustible job would be so arduous for them; therefore, they could not get the highest scores at school or university. For example, when I was at school, I used to study hard to attain the first position of the class. Although I had many astute antagonists, I did not abandon and kept studying hard. For the primary classes I became successful, but a great accident happened to me. My father established a grocery store for me. I was forced by my father to spend half of my time in store and the rest of my time on studying. As being in shop was taking my further energy, so I had no passion of studying. In that year, I lost the first position in the class and realized that having a part-time job diminish our abilities. Had not I spent my half of time in grocery shop, I would not have lost my position in the class.
To sum up, I offer not to have a part-time job when we are still studying at school or college. Spending half of our time would draw the passion of learning off and would not let us to learn many of things. A part-time job decreases the physical and mental energy of student; however, student would not be able to fulfill their requirements in the case of financial needs or educational wants.
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...d not let them keep studying as well. Secondly, students require physical and...
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...t have lost my position in the class. To sum up, I offer not to have a part-t...
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...time would draw the passion of learning off and would not let us to learn many of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2509.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70731707317 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72236976987 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474671669794 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6601602453 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.36 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.32 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.24 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122339675115 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412442255201 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407308254804 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882110883012 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324882278791 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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