Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year Do you think these people deserve such high salaries Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

In today's hectic life, it is an amazing fact that people from different walk of life differ in their concepts about whether athletes and other figures should get a good salary or not. There are many people who support this idea because celebrities have to work hard in order to attain their goals, others don't agree. My grandmother used to say '' big sacrifices should get big rewards''. It seems to me that she was right because those famous people spend a lot of years working hard to get what they wish, also they have to sacrifice other things that they really love.

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is and good example of my point
is a good example of my point

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