Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reason and examples to support your oppinion.
From the dawn of time, people have enjoyed spending their spare time by watching sports and other entertainment activities. These entertainers earn a lot of money every year. From my point of view, they deserve every cent due to the fact that entertainers and athletes provide good shows and because they make a lot of sacrifices. I will explain my statement, in detail, in the following essay.
To begin with, individuals watch entertainment, because it represents a good source to have a quality time. There are plenty fields such as concerts, movies, sports, reality shows, cartoons and so forth, each of them being designed for a certain group of age. Therefore, we can admit that pastime area comprises shows that meet every individual's needs. After a long, busy, stressful working day, many prefer just to sit in front of television and watch something that distracts them from daily problems. Moreover, those who prefer to have fun outside, can opt for going to a concert, to a stand-up comedy and so on. For instance, during week work I prefer to stay at home and watch something on the Internet. It can be a documentary, a concert or a movie. The show comes into my home and I do not have to pay anything for this. I really like watching comedies because they make me laugh and lift my spirit. So, people who do these kinds of shows should be rewarded properly.
Furthermore, most of these famous figures give up to their lives, especially to their childhood. There are millions of people who want to succeed in fields like entertainment, but very few are able to attain this goal. In order to become successful, most of them start training in early childhood, neglecting other aspects of that period, such as playing with other children, watching cartoons, televisions or just wandering around. The gymnasts are a compelling example of these. Back in childhood, the gymnasts were my heroes because they were executing difficult moves, but the same time they were gracious. I wanted myself to become one of them, not knowing how much hard-work is hidden behind their performances. They start training at the age of four, living in campuses situated away from their parents, being restricted from eating some foods and sweets. They do not have time to play and live their childhood. It is all about work. Not to mention, that they have to go both to the school and to do daily training. Thus, they really deserve to earn huge wages.
To summarize, people who work in entertainment field are entitled to be paid with millions of dollars. This is because they bring happiness in spectators' lives and because they put a lot of effort to become the best.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82135076253 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6350562134 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546840958606 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.443119364 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.962962963 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59259259259 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130299712968 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412051926158 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550832867608 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883763573369 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445578270027 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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