Essay topics: People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
Life represents a process that start the day one is born and ends with his death. Childhood and adulthood are two representative stages of this process, being very different one from another. From my point of view, the main differences between adults and children are related to financial independence and responsibilities. I will explain my statement, in detail, in the following essay.
To begin with, financial independence is the first sign which indicates that a person has made a step to adulthood. Even though students seem to gain independence when they go to college, they still depend economically on their parents and they do not truly understand the value of money. But, when people start to win money by their own, and they begin to pay for rent, transportation, clothes and all the other expenditures, that is the moment when they realize how important and valuable is every cent. Therefore, their behavior starts to change because they figure out that they have to control the flow of money. My own experience is a compelling example on this. Back in college, my parents used to pay for all my needs. They were sending me an amount of money monthly, and even more if I was texting them that I was out of cash. I was a diligent student, but the same time I loved having fun, going to the clubs or to trips. After I graduate from college, I got hired and my parents stopped sending me money. Suddenly, I realized that I was not able to spend the same amount of money on fun like before. Being employed in a junior position, the wage was not very high so I started to cut from my activities. This was a shocking moment for me, that made the transition from childhood to adulthood.
To continue with, some responsibilities, underlines the fact that people are adults. In this category ceremonies and events such as weddings and having children can be included. So, after gaining financial stability, the next step is to settle down, to find the right person to live the rest of your life and to have children. Moreover, this step brings many responsibilities. Not to mention that the adults will have to do many sacrifices. From now on, the couple is responsible to grow up a child, to provide him with the same conditions they were offered previous by their own parents. The couple is directly accountable for the happiness and wealth of the entire family. For instance, when my brother got married and his first child was born, he had to give up on certain things. He could not spend his spare time with his friends or buy the same amount of clothes as prior. Instead, he moved to a more family environment place, he bought a house and he start saving money for the future of his child. Thus, marriage is a tremendous event that marks a step in adulthood.
To summarize, there are significant differences between children and adults. First, an individual starts to become an adult when he starts winning money. Second, marriage plays one of the most important roles that defines the adulthood in many aspects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 959, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...ronment place, he bought a house and he start saving money for the future of his chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2502.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72075471698 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73678578629 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8955274218 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26666666667 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121225763918 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371759020431 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520476546879 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934439449557 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415319064103 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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