People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
There are many breakpoints in our life and all of them have significant for us. They have different meanings when we ,especially , are in a stage of transition from childhood to be an adults. Most of people recognize that starting a job is the most important milestone for us. I am with this statement. The lines will shed light on my view point.
First of all, economic independence is one of mark which an adult shows. Students are predominantly depend on their families to afford their expenses. No matter how old they are, they cannot become adult without earning their money. They have to find an job as so to become an adult. One can recognize an adult if he have some standards such as having private house.
Secondly, in addition to the matter, apart from what mentioned above, there is another point. When children work in a job they not only earn money but also gain responsibility which is one of most important feature an adult shows. They work in an office or shop until a certain hour so as to earn money. This is tough for children.
To sum up, taking all aforementioned reasons above, once cannot deny the importance of having a job in a children’s live. They become aware of the real life and gain responsibility.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...us. They have different meanings when we ,especially , are in a stage of transitio...
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Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e different meanings when we ,especially , are in a stage of transition from child...
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Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an adult' or simply 'adults'?
Suggestion: an adult; adults
...tage of transition from childhood to be an adults. Most of people recognize that starting...
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Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
...nsition from childhood to be an adults. Most of people recognize that starting a job is the mo...
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Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... an office or shop until a certain hour so as to earn money. This is tough for children...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, apart from, as to, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 1977.66487455 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 211.0 407.700716846 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76303317536 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93204678721 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 212.727598566 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616113744076 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 618.680645161 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4594376795 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.8125 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1875 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112603754031 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366316338715 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376920520671 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0703307778118 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02049701915 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.44 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 86.8835125448 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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