TOEFL TPO 11 - Integrated Writing Task

BOTH REDING AND LISTENIN DISCUSSED THAT LITERATURE SUCH AS BOOKS, NOVELS, AND POEMS ARE READ LESS BY THE YOUTH AS THEY DID IN THE PAST. THE ARTICLE CLAIMS THAT YOUNG PEOPLE READ LESS AND IT WILL HAVE ADVERSE EFFECTS IN THE FUTURE THEN PROVIDE SEVERAL REASONS. HOWEVER, THE SPEAKER REJECT IT AND REFUTES EACH AUTHOR’S REASONS.

FIRSTLY, THE READING STATES THAT LITERATURES HELP TO THINK BETTER, ENCOURAGE CREATIVITY AND BOOST IMAGINATION. THE PUBLIC MISS OUT GRATE BENEFIT SINCE THE READ LESS LITERATURE. ON THE CONTRARY, THE SPEAKER CLAIMS THAT SOME BOOKS SUCH AS SCIENCE AND HISTORY MAY NOT BE A LITERATURE BUT THEY ARE USEFUL BOOKS. FURHERMORE, DO NOT ASSUME THAT ONLY NOVELS ARE LITERATURE BOOKS.

SECONDLY, ANOTHER POINT WHICH USED BY READING IS PEOPLE READ UNUSEFUL BOOKS WHICH LACK OF INTELLIGENT INSTEAD OF READING INTELLIGENT ONES. THESE BOOKS DO NOT HELP PEOPLE AND WHATS MORE PEOPLE WATCH TV AND MOVIE. CONVERSELY, THE LECTURER OPPOSES IT BY SAYING THAT CULTURE IS NOT DECLINING BUT IT IS CHANGING. PEOPLE MAY READ LESS BUT THEY LISTEN MUSIC AND WATCH MOVIES. A GOOD MOVIE CAN GIVE LOTS OF THING INDIVIDUALS.

LASTLY, THE READING POSIT THAT NEW TALENTED WRITER HAVE STRUGGLE WITH PUBLISHING THEIR BOOK SINCE PUBLISHERS INVENT LESS THESE WRITERS. HOWEVER, THE PROFESSOR SAY THAT YES THE PROBLEM OF AUDIENCE IS TRUE BUT WE SHOULD NOT BLAME READERS. IT IS HARD TO READ AND UNDERSTAND NEW AUTHORS. MOREOVER, YEARS LATER PEOPLE WILL NOT UNDERSTAND THEM.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: WHAT'S
...NES. THESE BOOKS DO NOT HELP PEOPLE AND WHATS MORE PEOPLE WATCH TV AND MOVIE. CONVERS...
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Line 7, column 57, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'struggled'.
Suggestion: Struggled
...ING POSIT THAT NEW TALENTED WRITER HAVE STRUGGLE WITH PUBLISHING THEIR BOOK SINCE PUBLIS...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, however, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 242.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09504132231 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4768892858 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595041322314 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0600188105 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0625 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.125 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415204752718 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12345806924 0.0996497079465 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789445946765 0.0662205650399 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240846609091 0.162205337803 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547712352755 0.0443174109184 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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