Some gifts we receive are particularly special to us. Why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people receive gifts for birthdays, Valentine’s day, the Spring Festival, school graduation and other special occasions. In days past, gifts were much rarer. When I look back on the year I spent growing up in the poor family, I see very few gifts in my young life. There was one special present, however, that I will never forget.
In my third year of elementary school, my father gave me a bicycle after I placed first in the whole class. At that time, we didn’t have much money and so a bicycle to ride for fun was really a luxury item. From the first day of kindergarten I was a good student, and I consistently ranked in the top three, semester after semester. Still, my family never bought me a “prize” because they could not afford it. For reasons unknown to me, that spring was an exception. My father told me he would get me a gift if I did well again. Actually, I had never really thought about getting a present. It was enough for me to know that my parents are proud of me; that was all the motivation I needed. I was happy I could please them with good grades.
Once again, I ranked top of my class at the end of the semester. Not long after grades were posted, as I was returning home, I noticed there was a brand new bike standing in front of our small apartment. Running inside, I found my father sitting in a lounge chair fanning himself in the summer heat. I could see a smile on his usually serious face, but I rushed out to try the bike. From that day, that smiling face has been deeply etched in my memory, serving to encourage me during tough times.
Without a doubt, this bicycle was a special childhood gift, a tangible symbol of my achievements and my parents’ approval. Yet now that I am grown, I realize that the memory of that day is an even greater gift.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, look, really, so, still, third, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38278931751 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43232233032 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60237388724 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8253360778 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.85 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.85 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0690152257753 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0239145899891 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307699462563 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0560677039313 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457455879612 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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