some job can pay high salaries but require employees to leave their family and friends. some jobs pay few salaries but allow employees to stay with family and friends. which job do you prefer? why?
Money or family, that’s one of the oldest conflicts people have faced. If there’s an opportunity that I can either have a high paycheck but being send away from my family and friends, or have stable family relationships but little income, I would choose the former.
First, high paycheck normally means you can bring more value to the company or the society in general. And fulfilling the need of others or a bigger group seems more important than my own comfort and convenience. Take the job positions in United Nations as an example, they require most of the UN employees are capable of being sent overseas, especially to the developing countries where war, riot, poverty and pollution are common. Because they can go to the place that other people are not willing to go and are able to solve complex problems there, the high salary comes along as a compensation for their hard work and strong will. For this purpose, my happiness of being together with my family and friends can come secondary.
Secondly, even though I’m not going to do the humanity-saving type of work, it still makes little sense for me to assume that only my choice would influence the result because to keep up a relationship requires efforts from both sides. The false assumption underlying this hypothetical situation is my friend or family would never consider leaving our hometown. However, with modern time’s mobility, friends may relocate for their spouse, promotions, career change, education for their children and all kinds of reasons you can think of; parents may also move for better health care, air quality, natural environment to enjoy their retirement. So, what’s the point of staying in the same old town counting my thin paycheck if, for some reasons, they all left me?
I love my family and friends. They saw my vulnerable time and have always been supportive for me. If it’s possible I wish I don’t need to face this dilemma ever and could always have them around. However, future fills with uncertainty. Luckily, with today’s 4G technology, we can easily see each other’s face and feel each other’s present through video chat. That probably also helps on making the choice less distressful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... on making the choice less distressful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07837837838 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71559223706 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645945945946 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.6297187555 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.529411765 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7647058824 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173340591269 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523042231229 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486874666835 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997334688929 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333942685037 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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