Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People all say that young people are the future of human society. It seems like those carefree, green and sometimes confused young people who are struggling with finding their own niche in this world now can ever have some weight over the important decisions that directs all human beings. However, the plain fact is older adults are controlling this world and shaping the future because they are more experienced and responsible.
Young people can hardly take responsibility of themselves, then how can they be responsible for the human beings? However, it is the most crucial feature about young people that make them this way. Because they are young. So even if they made mistakes with serious consequences, they would still have time and energy to fix it. Like youngsters waste their body on junk foods, snacks and all kinds of alcohols and they stay up late for clubbing and parting with no worries on heart attacks just because they are young. They can undo the damages later in their life. This kind of carefree spirit can spread out in every aspect in their life from their career choice --- they can always switch to another track if they find the current job hateful, to wrong doings conducted to others --- they can always get the forgiveness because they are young and immature. However, people who are in the middle age, they don’t have this excuse to protect them any more. They brood and consider all factors before deciding. They have already experienced that people will eat up the consequences of their decision, so they will be more cautious and careful.
Additionally, young people’s major focus is on themselves because they need to find out their own identities and carve out a niche for themselves. Some people need a few years, some people need a decade. But If they can hardly figure out what they are going to become in the future, how can we believe that they will every influence the future human destiny? The early stage of adulthood is rife with confusion and conflicts. The young adult just came out of their parent’s protection and start to face the brutal world that feeding them with unfairness, unevenness, discrimination, emptiness and anxiety. It will take them some time to be fully aware of the imperfectness of human society and know what they can do about it. On the contrast, older grown-ups know the practical means that could be taken to make this world a better place for the next generation. After years of exploring themselves and the society, they can better identify the social problems and source the people and fund needed to resolve it. Solving real problems would definitely be counted as changing the future human society.
In sum, the older adults are taking the steer of humanity. The plain fact is no country would ever give their citizen’s livelihood to a youngster. Because young adults are not mature and experienced enough to take responsibilities or thinking for others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, then, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94779116466 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55538646784 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493975903614 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.141167265 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.56 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.92 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.04 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120455522201 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436422148746 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337397188698 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873988986363 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040635808709 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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