Some parents enjoy giving their children weekly spending money; for example, they may give their primary or middle school child a small amount of money each week to spend on whatever the child wants. Some people believe that this practice can cause children to develop bad habits or ideas about money and that parents should not give their children weekly spending money. Do you think it is a good thing or a bad thing for parents to give their children weekly spending money? Why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. Be sure to use your own words. Do NOT use memorized examples.
There is no shortage of opinion on either parent should give their children some money to spend on whatever they wish, or not. In my opinion children in a primary and a middle school should not be given money to spend on whatever they want. Let us consider what the advantages and the disadvantages of the suggestion made above.
First of all, letting children to spend pocket money on whatever they want will not show them the reality of financial side of a human life. In a modern world it is crucial for every person to keep their finance in balance otherwise people could go bankrupt in a blink of the eye. Parents who would give the money to their immature kids might impart a particular feeling that money is something that they can get and spend easily. This feeling will yields in irresponsibility of facing any occurred situation, when they become adults. A freedom of spending some money for something that children want will spoil their picture of the most important aspect of peoples’ life.
Doubtless, every child should learn what is like to be an adult subsequently. Parents should teach their kids that money should be earned. I remember myself in a middle school; I always got some pocket money for best grades in my class. It was one way to see that if you want something you need to work to get it. Nothing just appears if you wish, you should earn it. For this reason parents who will give their children some money they should explain that it is not so easy to get it and the money should be spend wisely, not just for the immediate gratification. Parents who will not implicate this strategy will not be able to teach their kids to maintain their finance in the future. Eventually their children will suffer of being unable to deal with the financial side the most pivotal part of life.
To sum up, disadvantages of the claim made above weights more than advantages. That is why I strongly hold the position that parents must teach but not spoil their children allowing them to waste resources.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'yield'
Suggestion: yield
...get and spend easily. This feeling will yields in irresponsibility of facing any occur...
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Line 3, column 536, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: Freedom
...red situation, when they become adults. A freedom of spending some money for something th...
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Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
... easy to get it and the money should be spend wisely, not just for the immediate grat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67409470752 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45416704537 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481894150418 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0844219942 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2222222222 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9444444444 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37236455177 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121888088038 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106656181453 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232015713412 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102031937116 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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