Some parents forbid their children from owning the smart phones, however the other believe that smart phone is important for keep in touch. which one do you agree? and why?

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Some parents forbid their children from owning the smart phones, however the other believe that smart phone is important for keep in touch. which one do you agree? and why?

Nowadays, in technologically world era, there are a lot of advanced devices for humane use. Almost, every body has a cellphone especially smart cellphone. Some parents bat their children to have their smart phones, but the other believe that smart phone is very useful. I strongly agree with the ideas of second grpup because of increasing rate of advancement and keeping in touch with the others like their teacher that are discussed in following paragraphs.
The first reason is that it is more easier for children who have tools such as smart phones to advance than those who are deprived. In fact, these children can use their phone to install some learning applications that are very useful not only for learning in some ways but also for entertainment. For example, there are some applications for playing that children can used it for entertaining and learn operations of mathematic such as add, substract, and so on at the same time.
The other one is that children who have such these smart phones could be in touch with the other people such as their teachers. In fact, even they can create a group and add thier classmates and their teachers as a group and share their questions and solvings with each other. It may be very useful especially when they are not in their school. In fact, they are get in touch with thier friends and teachers more than those that do not have these advices. So they can advance more than the other.
To sum up, some parents forbid their children form having smart phones, but others belive that smart phones are important tools for childeren. I strongly agree with the idea of the second group because it can result in more advances and more keeping in touch. So if they use their phones properly right it will be very useful.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 32, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...graphs. The first reason is that it is more easier for children who have tools such as sma...
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Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ore advances and more keeping in touch. So if they use their phones properly right it...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'in fact', 'such as', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.210682492582 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.148367952522 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.103857566766 0.0866891130778 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0593471810089 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0652818991098 0.0685040099705 95% => OK
Prepositions: 0.148367952522 0.118717715034 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0296735905045 0.0351676179071 84% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.40287938616 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0118694362018 0.0309702414327 38% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00296735905045 0.00188951952338 157% => OK
Determiners: 0.080118694362 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0237388724036 0.0209618222197 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0207715133531 0.0139019557991 149% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1770.0 2387.08602151 74% => OK
No of words: 310.0 408.028673835 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70967741935 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.270967741935 0.338922669872 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.2 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.135483870968 0.174417080927 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0774193548387 0.112833075102 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40287938616 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458064516129 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.9571110332 59.2087087015 76% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 20.6666666667 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2725727864 48.84282405 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.733333333333 0.644075263715 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 40.6666666667 45.7405998639 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.42391304348 1.45489161554 98% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439760063152 0.300154397459 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101138711279 0.103427244359 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0774007611441 0.0752933317313 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.507505051299 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.12088418307 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169979531011 0.114077575197 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112023925854 0.0781384742642 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.331251009819 0.336927656856 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0226588902595 0.067059652881 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313990529012 0.210909579961 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036895994353 0.0618886996521 60% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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