TPO 39- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is clear that job or career is a pivotal and ineluctable part of our life. There is a lot of anxiety among people about the security of their jobs and they may concern about whether it would be successful in the future. Even though a lot of people believe that in the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future because of laking complex conditions in those days, I am in favor of those people who believe it is easier to recognize what kind of job would lead to a good future in current years. There are two important explanations which are detailed in the following paragraphs.
First of all, technology has advanced. With the advent of new technology, they can help us to determine what would happen to a career not only more readily than past but also with better estimation than past. As a point in case, two years ago, when my friend graduated from university. He supposed to make a decision about his job. I can remember that he had some options: as an employee at a computer company, a teacher at some high education institute, or pursuing his studies. He used the internet and made his decision just in one week. He was able to access a lot of information about this kind of careers which enabled him to make a good decision. It is obvious that making a decision without having sufficient knowledge about it not only is hard but also take a lot of time.
Second, in the past, there was not any kind of counselor, but now there is a lot in any field. In the past, people have a problem with not having some counselor to help them. They just could access a few people who even may do not have adequate knowledge about the issue. It is obvious that at that time people did not have an authoritative data about any subject. For example, about my grandfather, who lived in a village near a big city in Iran, when he was a child there was not any person who even was not able to read and write. Although the next city was big, there were about five literate people in the city. It goes without saying that in those situations it was very hard to estimate what would happen to any career.
To sum up, I do not agree with the idea that in the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Not only has technology advanced but also there was not a lot of educated people in the past. To identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future people would need to have a lot of information about that job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, kind of, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.31458333333 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38255286609 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420833333333 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6594502154 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1363636364 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291789997217 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883297426487 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124122152317 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226661299908 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1467955945 0.0645574589148 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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