Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
In the era of 21st century, everyone should be updated about what's going around the globe. Today's generations are becoming faster and more intelligent due to the boon of technologies. In my opinion, if people want to be smarter and more successful, then they know everything around them. Hence, I agree with the given statement that parents should allow smartphones to their children for keeping pace with this fast-growing world.
The chief reason behind agree with the statement is that education. If children are allowed to smartphones then can access online resources which help in their study. Moreover, these online resources students can access from everywhere is they have proper internet access on their phones. For example, some online resources, such as Magoosh, Notefull, Khan academy, which helps them a lot and suppose they have some doubt in a particular topic, then they repeat video regarding that topic.
Furthermore, smartphones provide varieties of facilities such as video calling, messaging, call recording, games. So, by using those phones they can develop their interest in one of those functions. For instance, if one has more interest in playing games, then he or she might be develop an outstanding game. For example, Steve Jobs has more interest in playing with computers and we all know what he had become.
However, every coin has two sides. If children used phones too much then they suffer some severe problems such as less eyesight, anxiety, lonely ness, etc. Hence, parents should allow then to use smartphones, but with some restricting time limit and also they have to learn their children about the right ways to use their mobiles otherwise they might use smartphone in the wrong way.
To sum up, it can be said that if parents provide proper ways to use smartphones, then it will more helps to children in their personal and professional growth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, for example, for instance, in particular, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 290.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05172413793 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3860000907 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58275862069 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4307776244 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22792801202 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756788204688 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635175651241 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141920943878 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383436330816 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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