Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, I do think that's a really good idea for parents giving money to their kids on their scores. There are two significant reasons.
Firstly, for example, a boy in a USA family, if he help his parents to tidy over the lawn or just do the dishes, their parents would give them some money as a pay for their labor. It's the same situation for the marks in school. For kids in school, studying is their job, they need to work hard if they want to get a good grades or that's to say, money. If they can get money from their parents, they'll feel happy and hopefully they will be encouraged to keep working hard on their study. That's also a piece of good news for their parents.
Secondly, on one hand, students should be taught to know that "no pains, no gains." That's a good way to let students know that life is not easy and the real society is much cruel, it can help them to grow up. Growing up is so important for students, they'll be trained to be much stronger. They'll know that if they want to get the money, they have to work hard even compete with other students. On the other hand, somebody who can get high score should be praised, at least he or she is good at studying. But I don't mean that students who don't get a good score are useless, they can do something else besides study.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that's a good idea that parents give money to their kids for getting high marks. Children' hard working should be paid by their parents, money is a good choice to encourage them to continue work hard on their study. Furthermore, children can learn that "no pains, no games" and grow up in that way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, really, second, secondly, so, at least, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34838709677 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22268130303 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496774193548 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 389.7 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4425092632 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8666666667 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298629545921 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117101139752 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832770407212 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207291698523 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771458595 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.95 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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