Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people might think artists are less important compared to athletes who earning honor for a country in Olympic Games. Therefore, governments put a lot of money in support of athletics rather than arts. From my perspective, arts, indeed in the near several years, need more money support from the government.
Arts have their own special functions to benefit the whole society. Modern life has become very developed, people do not have to worry about lack of living materials. However, pursuing higher life in spiritual is advocated. During which, enjoying art is a fantastic way to improve ourselves which make life colorful. Imagine this a world without music and painting, life would be definitely boring. Besides, art is also a good way to boast the economy. For instance, Paris is thought to be an art center. Every year, many tourists visit there for big museums and art exhibitions which has been an important part of its economy. What's more, it is obvious that investing art has other countless benefits.
Arts are so essential from the above explanations, but there is a fact that arts have be overlooked by our government. Evidences are shown below. First, more money has been put into supporting athletics that into arts. Different salaries can be a convincing fact. Athletes in the national team get much more money that people who also works for the national museum. Second, when you go a sports game, you can see many sponsors' advertisements, but there are few in a music concert. Therefore, it is easier for athletes to get funds, because they are thought to earn glory in Olympic Games for a country.
While the athletics only help people to strengthen bodies to some extent, arts take a more important role than athletics in other aspects. Thanks to the special characteristics of arts, they can give us an eye to think about life deeply and imagine the future lively. You can see that many famous, for example, Qianda zhang who lived two thousand years ago, have been memorized and his masterpieces in painting have been appreciated by people today. On the contrary, few athletes can be still memorized one thousand years later.
If I were a senator in government, I would give more supports to arts projects. Based on what I have explained above, successive money should be sent to support arts' development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94923857868 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65070387424 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560913705584 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7466798367 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.76 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.24 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214564925229 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613708301243 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649674769117 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144550063647 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702827677668 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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