Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

Without a shadow of doubt, education plays a prominent role in every individual’s life. On the other hand, parents by encouraging their children have enormous influence in increasing children’s motivation. In this regard, parents use money as a prize to persuade their children. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that offering money for each child’s high grade is a great idea to motivate them, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. From my vantage point, the former helps children in manifold ways. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through three noticeable reasons.

The first reason that supports my idea is that paying money to children due to their good marks motivates them. It is no secret that different kinds of encouragement to children in every task or situation give more incentive to them for doing the task carefully. Furthermore, if they know they will get money at the end of their efforts, they will try doing their best. As a personal experience, when I was a child I didn’t get good grades in the school because I didn’t have any motive for studying better my courses. When my parents decided to give me money for each good marks, it had great impacts on my efforts. In fact, it was a turning point in my life, and after that, I tried to study better. Therefore, could not only I get high grades in the school but also it had considerable effects on raising my knowledge. As a result, I could go to a decent university.

Another equally noteworthy point supporting the opinion is that everybody is familiar with this anecdote that “no pain, no gain”. It implies that everybody should apply all their efforts to reach their goals. In fact, when children try to obtain money, they learn that they should strive to reach their goals. As a result of such trying in childhood, they will be more successful in their future career, because they are familiar with this fact that if they want a perfect result they should try to get it. For example, one of my friends believes that paying money by her parents was one of the precious events in her life. After that, she has learned to manage her goals and defined every goals’ accomplishments for herself. So, she adjusts her efforts to reach her goals. The more goals have big results, the more she efforts to achieve them.

It is confirmed that this idea has many advantages in boosting children’s economic views. Everybody knows that childhood lessons are the most important in creating a child’s characteristics. Therefore, when children learn to spend money in their childhood, it will have remarkable impacts on their future economic success. In this regard, parents’ considerations for encouraging children by paying money to them, are essential, because children learn how to spend their money in different areas. For instance, they may buy some books and games, to name but a few. Also, parents can go further and help their children to manage their money in efficient ways. Thus, children can be taught to their future economic decisions. A study has done recently which has specified that those people who have learned to spend their money in childhood have a more successful economic future than the people who never have learned to manage their money.

To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that not only paying money to children has great influences on boosting their knowledge but also it plays a crucial role in figuring their characteristics. It is highly suggested that authorities should inform the parents of the importance of this kind of encouragement. Also, scientists can investigate other techniques to encourage children by their families.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 97.0 43.0788530466 225% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3166.0 1977.66487455 160% => OK
No of words: 626.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05750798722 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00199880112 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85844709931 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447284345048 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 953.1 618.680645161 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2691370123 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9393939394 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9696969697 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39393939394 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369858013106 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929423100913 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692694736419 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211662221869 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638250715678 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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