Many parents are trying to provide their children with the best education. I do agree with the idea of offering money to the children when thy get high marks in school. I will explain the reasons for my stance in detail below.
To begin with, parents should always give their positive encouragement to their children whenever they achieve or accomplish their targets. I believe that this kind of motivation has a great influence on pushing the students forward towards more success in their life. Besides, it enhances the emotional relations between the kids and their parents by drawing the attention of the children that their parents follow their progress and performance. A research study has been conducted by American university confirmed the importance of the positive encouragement on the behaviors of the students. Money is just one aspect of how you can motivate your children, but it does not mean to neglect all the other possible ways. I remember that whenever I did well in my exams, my parents bought a beautiful present. I felt very happy and tried to work harder to get their satisfaction and their presents as well.
Secondly, giving money to your children in case they got good grades will help to associate the good performance in their study with the good outcome they will get. That is a great value when instilled in children, it will help them to be always alerted for more achievement and keep themselves on the right track of success. Having said that, I have to mention that most of the prominent studies in the recent years have asserted on the need for keeping yourself motivated to overcome all the possible obstacles that could face you in your life. This relation between reward and effort will certainly keep us motivated and high energetic. Personally, I try to learn my children that they will gain what they saw. In other words, the more effort you exert, the more gains you achieve.
In conclusion, I think that giving money to the children when they got good grades is a good idea that will enhance their educational performance, in addition to helping them to associate their efforts with the outcome they get at the end.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85983827493 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55269868727 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514824797844 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8084708041 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.058823529 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335678360794 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104714352513 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850532415343 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22601078571 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521180049358 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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