Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. do you think this is a good idea?
Success in school and getting good education is a gate to later success on everyone’s life. Parents try to motivate their children to study better, so that they would get better marks and finally reach higher educational levels. Some parents use money to motivate their children, for instance they give them some amount of money for every good mark they get. Although this is a motivational method used by several parents, nevertheless, I do not think this a good method. Accordingly, reasons are provided.
Firstly, Children should learn to study for greater goals than earning money to get effective education. I remember when I was a child my uncle used to reward my cousins with money for every grade they got that was higher than 80. Accordingly, my cousins always tried to do their best, so that they would get better marks, and subsequently more rewards. However, this attitude caused them to just care about their mark, and not about understanding their lessons. At the other hand, I was very interested in some of my subjects, like math, and used to have a very good focus on it. Although I was never rewarded for my marks, but because I really liked math, I was able to score in countrywide math competitions and as a result got acceptance in the best universities to continue my studies on math.
Secondly, by giving money as motivator to children, they will get used to doing any good thing just because of money, and eventually lose all other mottos that could drive them to success. For example, as a child, I always dreamed of being a math professor, and getting to the highest places in this subject and having my own patents. In contrary, my cousin always just dreamed of getting more money, and finding other ways to get money from people around him. He never thought about long distance vision of his studies, just about immediate success, which translated to earning money for him. Considering all this, he never had a plan for his future, and despite all his great grades, when he graduated, he chose to take part in gambling to get more easy money.
In short, parents should find alternative methods to motivate their children to study better, so that they would learn real value of studying and get motivations to focus on important things like planning for greater things in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79800498753 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55875175179 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511221945137 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0248917157 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.176470588 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5882352941 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330800569538 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111856974009 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810732559786 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213453167009 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110920300632 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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