I think rewarding children for each high grade is a good idea. I think this would allow the child to realize that if they do good in school, they can get a reward. My second reason is that this system could show the child what having a job would be like. Giving money to good children with high grades, would ultimately help the students out.
Rewarding children who are getting good grades can influence them very much to do better in school. One example would be my friend who gets rewarded whenever he gets a good grade in a subject. At first, he was not getting high marks, but one trimester, he had gotten an A in science. His parents gave him money, and ever since then, he was doing good in school.
Secondly, I think that rewarding kids with getting excellent scores, can show them the future. If they do good at their job, they get a reward. And example of this is every job. They give money to their employees if they are doing a good job. This reward system, would give kids a greater chance of knowing what life with a job would be like.
In conclusion, I feel that rewarding kids for good studying habits is good. It can show that doing good in school can benefit you, and the system can show the child what having a job would be like.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
...marks, but one trimester, he had gotten an A in science. His parents gave him money,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 1977.66487455 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 236.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33898305085 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.09877120312 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 212.727598566 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478813559322 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 294.3 618.680645161 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.51630824373 79% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.8707313295 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.2666666667 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7333333333 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376579070898 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157283439627 0.076458572812 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109734245256 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246165046444 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819233675181 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 90.09 58.1214874552 155% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.1575268817 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 86.8835125448 36% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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