When it comes to learning about life, people always cannot reach a consensus on the best method of achieving success. Some asserts that taking others' advice is better, while others believe that one can learn more from personal experience. It is a two-edged sword issue as both methods have advantages respectively.
On the one hand, accepting advice of family or friends is more efficient. One can reduce risks by learning others' life experience and avoid too many unnecessary failure and trials. The elders have been through the hardships in lives and can provide precious as well as sagacious solutions to problems in different life stages. For instance, my elder brother strongly recommends me to do part-time jobs during college since he knows most interviewers emphasize more on fresh graduates' working experience than on degrees. Consequently, I received many job offers now due to my rich working experience in college.
On the other hand, some people think that not every suggestion is applicable as others' approaches do not fit in each situation perfectly. In fact, everyone's circumstance vary and others success normally cannot be copied. Furthermore, people acquire more skills and knowledge by fulfilling tasks themselves. For example, my friend realized that her senior colleague's way of arranging meetings was a little out of date as they didn't know how to take the advantage of online calendar. Thus, she decided to organize working affairs in her own way.
Were I given a choice, I consider learning about life through personal experience more meaningful. Despite the bittersweet hardships and setbacks that I have to undergo, I believe that it is an indispensable path to learn about life as without mistakes people can learn nothing. Moreover, each life has distinctive color and I would rather form my own values instead of following others blindly, losing myself eventually. Hence, I think the best way to learn about life is to experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...eving success. Some asserts that taking others advice is better, while others believe ...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'many jobs'.
Suggestion: many jobs
...an on degrees. Consequently, I received many job offers now due to my rich working exper...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...etings was a little out of date as they didnt know how to take the advantage of onlin...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22082018927 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81170786561 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615141955836 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1471342382 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3529411765 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6470588235 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415482530547 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122988046648 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116369446868 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253034903952 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142066595585 0.0645574589148 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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