With the aid of technological advances, people have greatly improved their lifestyles by boosting efficiency in agricultural and industrial productions. Although new technology helps people to expand a range of human activities by reducing human labor in agriculture and industry, the environment is threatened by the impact on rapid population growth and urbanization. Since natural disasters have become more frequent and intense, I believe human activities involve higher risks of environmental degradation resulting in serious natural disasters.
First, forest areas have rapidly declined since people have prioritized economic activities at the expense of nature. Improved technology allows people to expand the production capacity of agricultural land, which led to population growth. In response to the greater capacity and demand for food supply, people enlarged farmland and housing by sacrificing forests including diverse ecosystems. Besides, people focused on planting the same types of trees to maximize the efficiency and profits for the timber industry. As a result, the forests that lost biodiversity suffer from a lack of stability of the forest ecosystem, which induces infectious diseases for trees and causes landslides.
Second, rapid urbanization and industrialization pollute the environment such as air and water. More people have moved in urban areas where people engage in more economic activities, more urban environments are affected by human activities. For example, in some cities that lack effective public transportation systems, the residents have to rely on driving their cars to commute, which creates traffic congestions resulting in air pollution from the emission of the cars. Moreover, factories also contribute to air and water pollution by blowing chemical vapors and disposing of toxic waste. Likewise, compared to rural areas, cities are more vulnerable to the harmful impacts of human activities.
Third, people have faced an increase in natural hazards as a result of environmental deterioration, which implies a dangerous tipping point in climate change. Since human activities of modern society have led to global warming by producing a greater amount of carbon dioxide, climate change exacerbates climate hazards such as drought and floods. While some areas of the earth suffer from a lack of rainfall, other areas are flooded by heavy precipitation. Furthermore, most coastal areas are at risk from rising sea levels due to global warming. As those serious climate disasters have occurred more frequently, people have to be aware of the environmental impacts of human activities and to miniate the harmful damage to nature. Otherwise, the earth would be inhospitable for humanity once the world passed the tipping point in climate change.
In conclusion, I believe human activities have deteriorated the environment by exploiting natural resources and producing pollution due to rapid urbanization and industrialization. Despite technological advances contribute to productivity for food and economy, urban land expansion and human activities must be controlled to create a sustainable relationships between nature and humanity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, likewise, moreover, second, so, third, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 43.0788530466 16% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2714.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77446808511 4.8611393121 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1316402516 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514893617021 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 888.3 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.51630824373 125% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4066068552 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.238095238 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236307213189 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713734698041 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059339613078 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138861761281 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579542131111 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 58.1214874552 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 10.9000537634 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.01818996416 127% => OK
difficult_words: 163.0 86.8835125448 188% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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