Some people believe that spending time away from people we care about helps us improve our relationship with them, because being away from these people makes us realize how important they are to us. Other people believe that to improve our relationships with the people we care about, we should spend as much time with them as possible, because spending time apart can damage or harm a relationship. Which view do you agree with and why?
Throughout history, friendship relationships have played a prominent role in personal life. Due to its paramount importance and direct impact on a given person, efforts for its improvements have always been amongst the top priorities of personal life. One of the issues regarding this topic is the spending time away from people we care about helping us to improve our relationship with them. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that being away from people we care about makes us realize how important they are to us, while others believe that spending time apart can damage or harm a relationship. I, despite the general consensus, contend that, we should spend as much time with our friends as possible. In what follows, I will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that striking a balance is a must in our relationships. Due to the complexity of new life, realistic limits are imposed on the amount of time we can spend with our friends. If we impose a low level of availability in our relationship too, others will become the top priorities of our life. After a while, we will adapt to spending time with our work, computer game, social network and so on. Studies show that, today social network become the best friend of 60 percent of people in Iran. In other word, they are rival of our friendship relationship. So, there is no doubt that absence really hurt to our relationship. To illustrate this issue, take a personal example, back in 2012, one day I think that spending a time away from my best friend help me to realize how important they are to me, but unexpectedly, results were completely different. I try to launch new work on campus, in this way became familiar with new people, spend all of time with them or at the office. Suddenly, I figure out we don’t have any common words, spending time apart cause to break our relationship.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that without keeping in touch with our friend, we can’t transfer our emotions to them. Spending time with them cause to talking about a variety of issues, we will become more familiar with their habits, emotions, concerns and so on. When they confront with a problem, we can help them to solve it. Take a personal experience as an example, I have a plethora of problems relating to the wedding party, not only are my friends supportive, but they also help me to manage problems. All efforts and presence beside me contributing to the fact that I realize how they are important for me.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that spending our time a part of our friend not only couldn’t improve our relation but also have awful effect. Striking a balance is the most important factor in order to improve our friendship relationship. Consequently, it is highly suggested that people keep in touch with their friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 623, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
... or harm a relationship. I, despite the general consensus, contend that, we should spend as much ...
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Line 10, column 183, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'effected'.
Suggestion: effected
...mprove our relation but also have awful effect. Striking a balance is the most importa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, regarding, so, while, i think, in brief, no doubt, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.876 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78850784471 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 757.8 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6946386352 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.583333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489929927289 0.236089414692 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137685865062 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141637874481 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319821771398 0.150856017488 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148049988008 0.0645574589148 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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