if you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
By and large, today manage anyone’s budget and economic issue has become the most concern of people. Due to the paramount importance of money, direct and indirect effect of its in one’s life, people always have been seeking a way to reduce living expenses. The question then is which way is more effective. Some people may consider finding a roommate to share a room can help a person to reduce their living cost, whereas some other some others may take an opposite viewpoint and think that either buy new technological devices less frequently or do not often eat outside can tremendously reduce living expenses. I, despite the general consensus, contend that first belief is more sensible. In what follows, I will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.
The first salient aspect to be introduced is that if a person finds a roommate to share a room, he can reduce a plenty of his living cost such as cost should be paid for lean home, bills and so on. Take a personal experience as an example, years ago, when I had graduated from university recently, I should live alone in megacity Tehran which is the expensive city in Iran, on the other hand, because of the lack experience, my boss distinguished a little salary for me, I really confronted with a majority of problems, I could not find any house that compatible with my money, after a while, I decided to suppose one of my friend who had the same situation to me to live together. Its really has solved our problem. We could find a house by the help of each other.
Another equally significant point is that with share a room, people could diminish other living expenses by dividing it between each other. For instance, both of them use the same furniture, so that the cost of buying it will be divided between them. In addition, they could divide their responsibility into a home. For example, when I and my friend live together, each day one of us cook food, in this way we were not obliged to bought food outdoor, This in turn contributes to the fact that our living cost reduces significantly.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that finding a roommate could help a person to reduce their living cost; furthermore, they had had a better time beside each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have always been
...ffect of its in one's life, people always have been seeking a way to reduce living expenses...
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Line 1, column 639, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
... reduce living expenses. I, despite the general consensus, contend that first belief is more sens...
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Line 4, column 683, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... same situation to me to live together. Its really has solved our problem. We could...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, then, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in brief, such as, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76262626263 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69547967011 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.573410347 48.9658058833 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 125.733333333 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200178631421 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571317195627 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499942647418 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119558894982 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04267605683 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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