TPO 30 Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading claims that there are a plenty of reasons that the story of burning mirror that was an ingenious weapon that defended the Greeks during the 2200 years age, is just a myth and Greeks of Syracuse never really built such a device. However, the lecturer finds all the ideas dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all.

The author argues that the ancient Greeks not technologically advanced enough to make such a device. A mirror that used in this weapon would have to be several meters wide. The technology for producing a large mirror with such specifications did not exist in ancient world. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that it was not necessary to build up such a large mirror, they could use it by attaching a plenty of small mirror together. So there is no need to such advanced technology.

Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that burning mirror would have taken a long time to set the ships on fire. During this time, the object had to be unmoving. It is unlikely that the Roman ships stayed perfectly still for that time. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that experiment shows that it take 10 minutes that wooden object to fire, but Romans ship was covered by sticky substance call pitch, these substance set on fire on just seconds and it spreading wile moving. Such a weapon would have not been impractical that reading states.

Finally, the reading asserts that burning mirror seem like on a weapon that the Greeks already had, Flaming arrows. So, the Greeks had no reason to build a weapon like a burning mirror. In contrast, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that although each of them was a common way of welting the ships in fire but, by flaming arrows was watched by Romans ships and they became aware of the possibility of shooting arrows, but in burning mirror the enemy see only a mirror and suddenly confront with a fire so it would be more surprising and much effective

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Average: 7.5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 432, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this substance' or 'these substances'?
Suggestion: this substance; these substances
...covered by sticky substance call pitch, these substance set on fire on just seconds and it spre...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e possibility of shooting arrows, but in burning mirror the enemy see only a mirr...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, furthermore, however, if, really, second, so, still, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 348.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71264367816 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40128120116 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511494252874 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.0865278488 49.2860985944 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.333333333 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 21.698381199 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.656286678365 0.272083759551 241% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.214631731125 0.0996497079465 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10087304411 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.364910488878 0.162205337803 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764305469188 0.0443174109184 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 53.8541721854 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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