Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sch

Parents cannot stay with us all the time. Their work may so busy. If we were children, what would we do? Some people state that it is better to do schoolwork during this time, while others support the opposite opinion. Both statements seem convincing and have their pros and cons. However, based on experience, I concur with the concept that the best use of that time is to have fun playing games and sports.

We can strengthen our relationship. Nowadays, people may have many friends, but they do not hang out very often or even not familiar with each other. They are just friends on Facebook. Thus, when we encounter a situation that parents are not at home. I think that it is the best time to do some sport with friends. For example, I play basketball with my friends every weekends. They were my classmate when we studied in high school. If we did not play basketball every single weekend, our friendship would not keep so long. It has been eight years since we met each others. Moreover, after we play basketball, we usually go to eat some meal and chat during the time. Owing to chatting with others, we know much more about other friends, which strengthens our friendship. Thus, I believe that doing sporting is a good beginning of improving affection.

Sports are good for our health. Parent often tell us that doing sports have a lot of advantages. For example, according to the National Geographic channel, it said that people will eliminate toxic substances when we are sweating. So that is the reason why sweat smell bad. I believe it, so I do exercise very often in order to make me healthier. Plus, people seem younger if they doing sports many times a week. For instance, once, I thought a man was around thirty years old, yet after I asked him. He told me he already forty or so. I was shocked. So I decided that I want to keep doing exercise as he does.

Truly, some people may say that schoolwork is important as well. Students have to finish their homework before they hang out with friends. It is hard to deny. However, parents do not wish their son to be a nerd and study all day. Thus, if children have time, it is better for him or her to do some sports or hang out with friends.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49131513648 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37968753613 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535980148883 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4028356418 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 54.8484848485 100.406767564 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.2121212121 20.6045352989 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393713589543 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910835807844 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972455455612 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262836443568 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892368453123 0.0645574589148 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.8 11.7677419355 49% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 58.1214874552 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.1575268817 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.87 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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