Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When talking about spending time with children, people have controversial ideas. In my opinion, I think if parents only have few hours to accompanied with their children, they should make used of the time to play games with their children.
First, nowadays children are under a great stress of academic courses in school. The job markets are very competitive, so everyone have to work very hard to learn new skills in school to get a better job after graduated. According to a research, children are less happier than before because of the high stressful education system. As a result, doing schoolwork with children and making your children hate you more is definitely a bad idea.
Second, I believe that life is short. We will never know what will happen next second. What's more, children grow up at an unimaganible speed. Imagine that when you are 60 years old and you live alone without the company of your child who works 1000 miles away. All you can do is watch old photographs you took with him. Will you still think that checking his homework and grades is great? Personally, I would rather take my children to a nice coffee shop and watching them licking ice-cream with a big smile and satisfaction than punishing them because they fail the math exam. In other words, I think parents should spend and treasure every moment with their child and create as many joyful memories as possible.
For these two reasons, if I had time, I would play games with my children, and take them to travel around.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less happy'?
Suggestion: less happy
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still, i think, talking about, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1245.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 263.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73384030418 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41827486417 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6463878327 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 618.680645161 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2245847292 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271136817581 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841092232813 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959030994865 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181763879908 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124782429401 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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