Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why? (TPO56-G)
It goes without saying that in the current progressive and sophisticated world where we live, social media use is widespread worldwide. In this regard, while many people prefer to live at the moment and enjoy the present time and do not care about social media, others believe otherwise and prefer to take advantage of these platforms. In my view, I totally support the second group for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, using social media gives individuals a chance to present themselves professionally. To be more specific, nowadays, many people use social networking sites like Linkedin as a general portfolio to show their works to other experts in their field. This platform provides a professional environment for both employees and employers to connect. My friend’s experience is a compelling example of this. She is an elite in structural engineering and has published many papers in high-ranked international journals. She always updates her social media and explains her works and projects, and so on. Last year, while working on her master’s thesis, she got a Ph.D. offer from a German professor who had seen her Linkedin profile. Eventually, she decided to continue her work in a new environment, and now she is one of the best students in the new department. Had she not updated her social networking sites, she would not have had this opportunity to continue her studies abroad.
Furthermore, another equally remarkable point is that utilizing social media is a funny experience and also provides a virtual backup of different moments and would come in handy later in life. To be more vivid, people who travel to a nice place can share some fantastic pictures with their friends on social media and share their exciting moments with whom they love. Moreover, they can refer to those pictures after a while, review their happy moments, and feel more satisfied, especially when they feel sad or are not in a good mood. For example, during the current pandemic and the policies in different countries, most people were in quarantine and experienced challenging circumstances. Reviewing the last trips’ pictures and memories was helpful to concur the hard moments and recover their spirit. If there were no social media and such memories, facing this hard situation would have been more complicated.
By taking into account all the above reasons, I believe that recording experiences in social media are helpful. This is because it helps us present our works experience properly and have a backup of our information which will be beneficial in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, while, for example, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12325581395 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79761642346 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576744186047 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.560476656 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.15 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205439532085 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540570761779 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596734506583 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119050102202 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217375073169 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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