Some people prefer to take a position in a company and work for the company Other people think its better to go into business for themselves Which do you think its better

Essay topics:

Some people prefer to take a position in a company and work for the company. Other people think its better to go into business for themselves. Which do you think its better?

It depends on the person's preference and mentality whether to run their own business or employed in other's supervision. Personally, being a free thinker and risker taker love to work in my business plan rather than investing my energy and intellectual 10-5 in the office. I feel this way because of the two reasons which I explore in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, we can make a fortune by executing our idea of business which is almost impossible in someone else job. Obviously, it seems risky to be an entrepreneur because it demands a lot of time and resources without giving the promised benefit. However, everything need to take a shot in order to show their effectiveness, and once it works it harbors great wealth that other profession neverland. In contrast, employment seems to look attractive first because of the fixed money but remains vapid and less rewarding in the long run. Thus, many people felt regret doing the job for their career despite they have huge potential and skills.

Furthermore, it helps to enhance our leadership skills and intelligence creating an influential personality. Through engaging in it, person can able to think critically, manage the work harmonically, and free to exercise their thoughts. Unlike it, people in employment should follow the employee's consent for performing the task, apprehend of losing the job and suffer from mental and physical weariness. As a result, their personality trait far from improving.

In conclusion, I think that a business plan is the only way to make us rich and harness our personality at the same time.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
It depends on the persons preference and mentality whether to run...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[4]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'jobs'.
Suggestion: jobs
...ch is almost impossible in someone else job. Obviously, it seems risky to be an ent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, look, so, thus, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06818181818 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88534938038 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.655303030303 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9102534657 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.923076923 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180746105592 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529232211797 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462693224025 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975160025333 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266232659282 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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