Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology has a significant influence on our lives. Today, we use technology on almost every aspects of our lives and we cannot avoid its influence anymore. One very important example of technology is computers. Some people believe that computers have made our lives more complex and stressful, while others disagree. In my view, though purchasing and maintaining computers are somehow expensive, computers have created a better quality of lives for many reasons.
The first reason is that computers provide us a way to get any information. By accessing to the internet, one of popular way to obtain information is by using a personal computer. Also, the personal computer provides us with so many options through it’s software and applications. For instance, I have working as a trainee in one of the health care company. One of my job duty is to do a seminar that assigned by my mentor every day. Even though I come back home at 6 PM everyday, I did not face difficulties to do my job duty. By using my personal computer at home, I get access to the internet and searching for any material that I needed in doing the presentation. Moreover, when I downloaded the necessary material, I can organized and arranged it by using one of computer’s application. However, If I do not have computer, I would have to go to a library, then looking for books and articles. Which is totally inconvenient and waste of time. As you can see, computers have helped us a lot with simple and comfortable way.
The second reason is that computers have improved the quality of health services. During the last decades, health care providers have used computers in recording, monitoring, and even dispensing medications to patients. and consequently improve services. For example, I worked as a pharmacy technician last year. When I started working, I was overwhelmed by how much computers have been involved in the pharmacy work flow. I learned later that the usefulness of computer on patient lives is so tremendous , the night mare of dispensing incorrect medication to patients have been minimized to its lower level. For the reason, by using computers all patient history information have recorded and any health care provider can access to this information to ensure the patient has the right medication, and right diagnosis. In addition to, there is a software application that help pharmacists to make sure that the medication, that would have to dispense would not cause any undesirable effects on patients, or get information about the direction of use. This experience taught me this, computers play a crucial step in improving our lives and ultimately it will make us feel more comfortable and relax.
In short, without doubt Computers have made our lives much more better and convenient. Not only do improve the quality of lives, but they also gives us a quick and so easy way to get important information. Computers have revolutionized our lives and we should all support their development and use.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in short, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2537.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12525252525 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14285934681 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509090909091 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3477880349 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.962962963 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.40740740741 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258432726272 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767381871088 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839584965443 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175331506027 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388267021221 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.