Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believes that the internet is very useful as it brings people a lot of valuable information, while the other consider that the excess information brought by Internet will cause problems. It is hard to say which opinion is right, because people makes judgement depending on their own experiences. However, according to my own experience, I think that Internet does bring us valuable information.
First of all, we can do many things more conveniently with Internet nowadays. For example, I would have to spend a whole afternoon shopping at the stores when I wanted to buy clothes and shoes ten years ago, but now I just need to open the laptop, search the online stores and click the mouse to complete the purchase, without spending anytime on the transportation and shopping around different stores. Also, I used to purchase a lot of paper books and I always carried them with me when I traveled. Though I enjoyed so much from reading, it was just a little painful for me to carry those heavy books around places. Now with Internet, what I need to carry is just a tablet or cellphone, then I could download as many digital books as I want.
Moreover, Internet helps us to connect with our friends more closely than before. For a person who lives thousands miles away from his/her hometown like me, it was always difficult for us to keep in touch with our friends back there because of the distance and time difference. However, with the internet and social media becoming popular now, I get the chance to share the happiness and sadness with my friends through facebook, Instagram or Wechat, and we never feel embarrassed by doing so. Indeed, I really think social media is a good channel for people to express their feelings, thus making their families and friends understand more about themselves.
In a word, in spite of the fact that there may be some disadvantages of Internet, I feel that the advantages of the Internet are more obvious that it does bring people many conveniences in daily life and make people more connected with their friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople more connected with their friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, thus, while, for example, i feel, i think, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81232492997 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61359398643 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577030812325 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.2661910361 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.153846154 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4615384615 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271883922481 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997635126237 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779925000165 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172176246415 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840567517769 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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