Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?

SINCE THE DAWN OF INTERNET, INFORMATION PLAYED TREMENDOUS ROLE IN EACH CIVILISATED COUNTRY. NOWADAYS, MANY ARE ADAMANT THAT A MYRIAD OF ELEMENT SHOULD BE TAKEN INTO CONSIDERATION IN ORDER TO EXAMINATE ITS DESTRUCTIVE AND CONSTRUCTIVE FACET OF THIS MATTER. SOME PEOPLE MAY HOLD THE VIEW THAT PEOPLE USE A LOT OF VALUABLE INFORMATION TO SOLVE PROBLEMS. OTHERS TAKE AN OPPOSITE VIEW POINT AND BELIEVE THAT IT MAY CREATE SOME CHALLENGE SUCH AS PRIVACY ISSUES. FROM MY VANTAGE POINT, I CONCUR WITH THE FORMER GROUP AND THE LINES BELOW WILL SHED ON LIGHT MY VIEWPOINT.

THE FIRST REASON TO MENTION TO SAY IS THAT THE USE OF INTERNET BOOST STUDENT’S SUCCESS. DUE TO ADVANCE IN INTERNET TECHNOLOGIES, WE SEE MANY USEFUL VIDEO ON YOUTUBE. SOME STUDENTS PREFER TO STUDY AT HOME BY WATHING YOUTUBE CHANNELS RATHER THAN LISTENING PROFFESOR IN THE CLASSROOM. A VIVID EXAMPLE WHICH CAN BE GIVEN IN TO THE SUBJECT IS ONE OF MY OWN EXPERIENCE. I PREPARED TOEFL EXAM ON YOUTUBE CHANNEL AND READ SOURCES WHAT I SHOULD DO. THAT IS, INTERNET HELPS ME TO STUDY BETTER.
SECONDLY, IN APPROAACHING THIS ISSUE, APART FROM WHAT MENITONED ABOVE, THERE IS ANOTHER SUBTLE POINT WHICH MUST BORNE IN MIND. THE NEW INFORMATION TECHONOLGIES CREATE NEW JOB OPPORTUNITIES. THE YOUNG PEOPLE CAN WORK WITH OVERSEA COMPANIES IF THEY KEEP UP WITH INTERNET PROGRAMS SUCH AS JAVA, CC+. A NOTEWORTH REFRESHINGLY INTELLIGIBLE STATISTICS REVEALS BY RECENT RESEARCH WHICH CONDUCTED AT MIT UNIVERSITY AT THE USA, SHOWS THAT THEY TEND TO RECRUITE WORKERS WHO ARE EAGER TO CODING SCRIPTS AND BUILDING INTERNET SITE.THE RESEARCH STUDY HAS CONDUTED BETWEEN 100 TECH COMPANIES AROUND THE WORLD.

TO WRAP UP, ONE CAN CONCLUDE THAT INTERNET IS THE BEST INVENTION OF TODAY’S WORLD. EVEN THOUHT THERE MIGHT BE SOME UNWANTED ISSUE, WE SHOULD GIVE ENOUGH IMPORTANCE IT AND SHOULD NOT LIMIT THE USE OF IT.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'have BORNE' or 'bear'?
Suggestion: Have BORNE; Bear
...HERE IS ANOTHER SUBTLE POINT WHICH MUST BORNE IN MIND. THE NEW INFORMATION TECHONOLGI...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...H INTERNET PROGRAMS SUCH AS JAVA, CC+. A NOTEWORTH REFRESHINGLY INTELLIGIBLE STAT...
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Line 4, column 478, Rule ID: EAGER_TO[1]
Message: With 'eager to', use the base form of the verb: 'code'.
Suggestion: Code
...ND TO RECRUITE WORKERS WHO ARE EAGER TO CODING SCRIPTS AND BUILDING INTERNET SITE.THE ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, apart from, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04530744337 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75891438655 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.640776699029 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4086167611 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7058823529 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245369289799 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687487178984 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821026604232 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126209810629 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770090094405 0.0645574589148 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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