Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Nowadays, all people want to make the world better. Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. On the other hand, some people think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. I, however, think that the government should use this money to improve more basic needs because there are many problems happen right now, such as pollution, transportation, and the poor people.
Firstly, the polluting environment is a big concern with the government and all of the people in the earth. If the environment becomes more and more contaminated, we will have to live with the dusty air and the polluted water or polluted rivers. Therefore, we will be able to get many dangerous diseases, especially are cancer. In addition, it can be a cause of many viruses, which can shorten our life. Furthermore, there are many animals living on the earth, so if the environment is polluted, many animal species will not have a place to live. As a result, plenty of animal species will be dying or will be listed in the red book.
Secondly, the equally important for people is the transportation. For example, in Ha Noi, at the rush hour, buses always full of people. Some people cannot go to work on time; as a consequence, they do not catch the regular bus. In addition, in some country, many bridges have cracks and highways buckle have made the accidents happen more and more often.
Finally, as you know, many the poor people have to live in the worst condition in some country. Some people have to stay in the slums or they do not have a place to live. Besides, some kids cannot go to school or they have to go a far and dangerous distance to reach to the school. I assume that the government should donate some money to develop their life.
In conclusion, I believe that if the government put as much money as possible on more basic needs, people in around the world can have a wonderful life. Although people can not have a great computer technology, they can be happier after 3 big trouble of the world has been solved.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 77, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...s a big concern with the government and all of the people in the earth. If the environment...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'you know', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211764705882 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.157647058824 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0917647058824 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0564705882353 0.046263068375 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0305882352941 0.0685040099705 45% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110588235294 0.118717715034 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0282352941176 0.0351676179071 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54893573106 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0329411764706 0.0309702414327 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.112941176471 0.0887237588012 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0376470588235 0.0209618222197 180% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00235294117647 0.0139019557991 17% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2089.0 2387.08602151 88% => OK
No of words: 372.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61559139785 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.295698924731 0.338922669872 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.198924731183 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137096774194 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0887096774194 0.112833075102 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54893573106 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475806451613 0.524397521467 91% => OK
Word variations: 50.0685453685 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.6 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1611987495 48.84282405 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.45 120.699889404 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9 0.644075263715 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 38.4924731183 45.7405998639 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.43269230769 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32089653525 0.300154397459 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.16488568939 0.103427244359 159% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10640452852 0.0752933317313 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.557874724352 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135124371208 0.151897553556 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144567489207 0.114077575197 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167544267677 0.0781384742642 214% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.320523776046 0.336927656856 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0824813525093 0.067059652881 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240094420133 0.210909579961 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.189671294216 0.0618886996521 306% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8870967742 42% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 8.42114695341 47% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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