Kids are future of a nation and as time passes and human beings become more developed, parents become more acquainted with the importance of education and fostering. Although it is opined by some that parents should be required to take care of the younger children, this essay is trying to refute this notion. Throughout the following paragraphs, among the most predominant reasons in support of this contention preparation period and self-satisfaction will be meticulously scrutinized to advocate this standpoint that it is more beneficial for older children to take care of the younger child.
To commence with, regarding the hustle and bustle of the modern hectic life, parents expend most of their time out of home and their child. From dawn to dusk, they must work to gain extra money to overcome the hurdles, therefore juvenile should pay attention to kids. Not only does it help youngsters to feel a sense of self-satisfaction, but also the young are more aware of their needs and interests. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what has elaborated above. Here, I elucidate one of my own experiences. When I was 15 years old, my brother was born. Our sluggish economic condition led to my mother asked me to aid them in this demanding task. In primary stages, it was overwhelming to afford this schedule, but with time, it boosts my responsibility, level of maturity and mutual understanding.
Furthermore, taking care of newborn babies assists juvenile to become prepared for their ensuing lives. To more clarify the condition, I mention the outcome of one fieldwork conducted at AUT School to probe the role of fostering kids by youngsters. About 80 fraternal twins, at the ages of 18-21, were separated into two groups, ones who have permission to take part in fostering activity and the others who have no right, and studied for 8 months. Amazingly, the results revealed that the more adolescents involve in fostering, the more they become organized. Accordingly, fostering activity promotes their social communication skills and team-work project skills and besides these, causes feel some sole experiences.
To recapitulate, I pen down saying that it can be more advantageous for youngsters to pay attention to the younger child and the profits outweigh the downsides and barriers. It heights their responsibility, self-confidence and self-satisfaction, level of maturity and mutual understanding to be prepared for their future lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, furthermore, if, regarding, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18341708543 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09470333107 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58040201005 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5905352896 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.611111111 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198699174199 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566897985136 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918488284514 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121881486867 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109504260858 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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