Some people think that some lessons for young children (age 4-8) which include video games can serve as effective and interesting ways of learning, while others think that these lessons are quite distracting and can be seen as a waste of time. What is your opinion and why?
<p class="p1" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span style="letter-spacing: 0px;">Nowadays, young people use most of their time after school and on the day of no school to play video games. Some people believe that these games inspire them efficient benefits for young people. However, almost all of people including their parents want them to stop playing video games because these games distract them and are waste of time. I believe that young students cannot receive good benefits from video games. There are three reasons for supporting my opinion. </span><br></p><p class="p2" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; min-height: 20.3px; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1"></span><br></p><p class="p1" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1">First, the sight of young students is gradually down to worse by video games. When people have an opportunity to play any games, they have to keep focusing on-screen of devices. Then, they come up with ideas that their eyes are so exhausted and need glasses. Therefore, their parents have to pay money to them to buy glasses or eye contacts even their school tuition and game devices are so expensive. </span></p><p class="p2" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; min-height: 20.3px; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1"></span><br></p><p class="p1" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1">Second, video game removes young people form their time to play with their friends outside. Technology completely changes by comparing it with the past, so they are able to play with their friends in video games. However, opportunities to play outside now is lower than in the past. Children can learn tolerance and communication from playing outside. For example, they slip down to the ground and scare and blood are making by their face. From this experience, they will be more careful about the ground, not more blood. </span></p><p class="p2" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; min-height: 20.3px; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1"></span><br></p><p class="p1" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1">Third, young students use their free time as a waste of time when they play video games. Instead of games, they are able to concentrate on their studies such as newspapers, various materials of books, and homework. What they use their free time as flexibility decides their future university and jobs. For instance, English is already spreading to all of the worlds, so what people can speak it is recognized as normal. Thus, people who have their mother tongue as English can acquire a second language in their free time. After that, their future will be more worldwide than people who play video games. </span></p><p class="p2" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; min-height: 20.3px; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1"></span><br></p><p class="p1" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1">In conclusion, I think that young students should not spend their time playing video games. There are three reasons to imply my opinion. First, video games make young students’ eyes worse. Second, young students who play video games do not have opportunities to play outside with friends. Third, it is a waste of time for young students to play video games. </span></p><p class="p2" style="margin-bottom: 0px; font-stretch: normal; line-height: normal; min-height: 20.3px; caret-color: rgb(0, 0, 0); color: rgb(0, 0, 0); white-space: normal; -webkit-tap-highlight-color: rgba(26, 26, 26, 0.301961); -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto;"><span class="s1"></span></p>
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 3908, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...stance, English is already spreading to all of the worlds, so what people can speak it is ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4817.0 1977.66487455 244% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 660.0 407.700716846 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 7.29848484848 4.8611393121 150% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06857624559 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.64595871321 2.67179642975 249% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.324242424242 0.524837075471 62% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1116.0 618.680645161 180% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 274.802953447 48.9658058833 561% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 218.954545455 100.406767564 218% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0660541614094 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529998607195 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542041382866 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0660541614094 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.0 11.7677419355 238% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 25.65 10.9000537634 235% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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