Some people think that we learn our most important lessons in school. Others think that the knowledge we acquire outside of school is the most important. which one you prefer and why?
Knowledge is not only what we learn from textbooks or in schools, but it’s also about the lessons one can learn far beyond the school premises. From my experience, I believed that knowledge that one acquire outside of school is the most important as it allows an individual to cope with surrounding circumstances, to become more responsible, to grow at their own pace and to gain knowledge from people of different interests.
First of all, school lessons didn’t teach us how to face a real-life problem, as when I was in St. Mary School, my classmate Vashi had some financial crises at home as she lost her father, but she and her mother didn’t give up on life. Vashi started giving tuition after school and her mother started her lunch box service. This made vashi more responsible and taught her how to act in a certain circumstance, which she never learns in school.
Also, schools are mostly concerned with competition, it provides a network where students compete with each other in spite of diversity in their intellectual level whereas outside lessons taught us to grow at our own pace. For instance, after my graduation in mechanical engineering, it was hard to find a job I was really interested in and on the other hand, my batch mates were well-placed in multi-national companies. Eight months later I have my perfect job as a simulation engineer and this life event taught me that it is okay not to compare yourself with others and grow at your own pace.
Moreover, the outside world taught the benefits of interacting with people from different backgrounds and which furthermore increases one's ingenuity. For example, once I met an archaeologist who told me about pyramids of Giza and about the mysterious voids discovered. Though I had no idea about pyramids, this conversation increases my curiosity and intelligence about the subject.
From my perspective, I posit that knowledge we acquire outside of the school is most important because it makes a person more responsible, more intellectual and allows an individual to concern about self-growth without being competitive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, first of all, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10315186246 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96967317957 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561604584527 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.1915440658 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.416666667 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0833333333 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 5.45110844103 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262575120828 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941601725522 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782122090137 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148508912738 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860032858384 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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