Some young adults want independent from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a long. Which of these situations do you think its better? Use specific reasons and example to support your answer
Some young adults prefer to independent from their parents as soon as possible. It is a common phenomenon existing in our society, but I consider the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. This opinion is supported by the following reasons.
First of all, they can't get financially advantage from their parents. Most young adults have to go to college or university. They have a tough time managing a part-time job and school work because there is a lot of homework in general university. In fact, some of my university friends got bad grades because they couldn't concentrate on study. All of them independent from their family at an early stage, but I think the duty of a student is studying. Therefore, I consider that their independence was too early.
Second, they can be taken care of by their family when they are sick in bed. In general, we can deal with the sickest or injury by myself, but sometimes we can't do it. In my personal experience, I have broken my leg at an intersection near my house. Although I couldn't cope with it at that time, my parents helped and took me to a hospital.
Certainly, independence is generally good and helpful for the individual because it teaches individuals how to take care of different responsibilities, and how to handle things by yourself. However, in the case of young adults is not mature enough, I believe staying with parents will be better. parents can provide guidance and help with when their children need it. it is too risky to independent from their parents completely, but they can study independence gradually from their parents. For example, parents give them responsibilities that should be handled without supervision.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, the disadvantages of early independence from their parents overcome these advantages of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00327868852 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01837782197 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2804538511 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3157894737 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0526315789 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337352731721 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108193584063 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118059786553 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203142670446 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731115746865 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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