Spending time on technology
A glance at people's atitude toward childern's nurturing brins to the light a question that has been asked repeatedly, namely, wheter it is more beneficial for childerns to spend their time on technology or playing outside with their friends or playing with simple toys. Some people holding the prespective that it is far more benefical for childern to play on technological gadgets like, computers, playstation, mobilephones, to name but a few. However, others stay at oter side of the continuum, beliving that playing outdoor acticities or with simple toys is far more advantageous for childrens. As far as iam concerned, I am of the last group, believing that childern who raised by playing with their peers or simple toys get more benefits. The reasons to substantiate my view point is elaborated upon hereunder.
To commence with, It is developing social skill that comes as a consequence of playing with ther peers. Nowadays the key part to be succeed is to be able to communicate with orther people mor efficiently. The great way for developing and practicing such skills is playing with one's peers.As a tangbe example, having played with his peers in our neighborhood, My little broder have broden his social skill. he have lerned how to communicate and cope with others more efficiently. Had not he spent his time playing with his peers, He would not have become a prosperperson in communicating.
Besides. with no doubt, children who get used to play with simple toy can enjoy the greater sense of imagination. In today's world childern are packed with fantasy world which there is no room for childern to make imagination. Childrens who play with simple toys all the time imagine them selves as a new character or in a new environment, leading to increasment of their imagination. An example of mine can drive this notion home. Having used to play some game boards, I was obsessed with making an imaginary situation in which I was a leading business man. So I had a better imagination compared with my peers who used to play video games called playstation. Had not played a game board, I would not have a powerfull imagination ability.
Admittedly, playing and spending time with technology has some merits that no none can deny. It is a wonderfull way to get familiar with technology trend in society. However. I still claim that even though it will prepare childern for their potential job opportunities in their future, it lead to decresing the children's communicating abilty. So its pors cannot vanquish its cons.
Having considered all the reasons and examples into consideation. I belive that it is far more beneficial for childrens to play with their peers and play simple toys rather that play or spen time on technology. Not only does it provide them a great enhancment in imagination ability, but also it nurture their communication ability.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, so, still, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9875 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89928152019 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50625 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3795111564 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.75 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115005641995 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409415311628 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860982176371 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884127629172 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786330161209 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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