Sports teach people about life.
Sports play an important role especially in modern life. Some see this kind of activities as a way to enhance their physical and mental ability to have a better life. But do sports can teach people about life? In my view, sports can be a great teacher in everyone’s life and for that I have two important reasons.
First of all, sports teach us not to give up. I believe this is one of the most important factor to have a successful life. Losing scores in sports is quite common. In such a situation not to giving up and keeping a positive attitude towards the game is crucial to comeback the game. I think this what we need in real life. In many occasions we might feel that we are losing an opportunity in or life. For example, once I was taking an exam and in the middle of exam I felt I was doing it so bad. I couldn’t concentrate and felt I would fail the exam. But suddenly I recalled a football game in which our rival let two goal. We felt disappointed in that game, but our captain get us together and explained why we are playing football. He said we are here to win and I don’t let you to be disappointed. I want you to do your best and show your real selves. There were only 5 min remaining, but we managed to drew the game. That’s why I believe that sports in general and football in particular can teach us some lessons.
The other reason I have to hold such an opinion is sports in which we play as a team will teach us some crucial lessons regarding how to work with eachother and be a responsible individual. To Do sport in form of a team like a football team needs some qualities including being able to work with others and be responsible. To be a successful person in today’s life you need to work and cooperate well with others and I consider participating in team sports as an extraordinary opportunity to learn these qualities. When I played football it was like I was in a class. During training sessions and especially during game I learned who to support my teammate and how to play my role and help the team to score goal. Those lessons I learned in that time now are helping me in my everyday life. In my relationship with my beloved wife is where I use this lessons. For example, being responsible is an important aspect of any relationship. And if you don’t have such a quality your marritial life will be like hell. Playing football was a real call for me to learned this quality. That is why I think sports in general might teach us some qualities which we will need them in our life.
In sum, sports play an important role in modern era. This kind of activities have many benefits for us including having a better physical and mental abilities. But I believe sports, especially team sports can teach us some lessons that are related to our social life and they will help us to be a better person and have a better life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'to come back'?
Suggestion: to come back
...ve attitude towards the game is crucial to comeback the game. I think this what we need in ...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y opportunity to learn these qualities. When I played football it was like I was in ...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...hip with my beloved wife is where I use this lessons. For example, being responsible...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, well, for example, i think, in general, in particular, kind of, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3717472119 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63409854513 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408921933086 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2522726647 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8125 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71875 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281372329449 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864595132415 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137816840112 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219459103847 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123560132102 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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