Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People would be happier with fewer possessions.
These days, human beings are more looking forward mentally health that happiness is in the heart of that. To meet such a goal, being happy, people around the world notice and discuss the affected factors on individuals' happiness. Even though some people are firmly of the opinion that someone's happiness is interwoven to her or his possessions, but others think otherwise. I, as a person, subscribe to this idea that amount of possessions has nothing to do with happiness. In identifying roots of something, we must think deeper on issue and consider the permanent factors, not those that have different effects rely on circumstance in which an individual is.
In the first place, these days, people hold a hectic life in which finding satisfaction and happiness seem to be hard. Individuals' demands that are more financially, bring them a misunderstanding of happiness and delight. They think if they have more belongings they would carry happy life, such a view is more common among young people. They endeavor in their youth to have more possessions in their future lives. When their belongings increased, it is worth to mention that most of them reach such a goal at the expense of their youth, most of them not only will not see their lives as a happy one, but also will get frustrated of it and be sad. For instance, my grandfather, when was alive, was always cautioning us, my siblings and me, against such a belief. I remember all of his warning and his life's experiments that he said to us. Above all of his statements that he said those days to us was: I give my youth to obtain money and possession, because I think it was a great bridge to make happy my family and myself, but ultimately though I reached, but I became a sadness person. After such an expensive experience he familiarized with the concept of happiness, it is being happy at the moment and use present time of living in the best way whether with belongings or not. It is not matter to have how much money inasmuch as a poor person who knows the worth of present time to be happy will be more pleasure and happy in comparison those reach person that don’t value the time.
Secondly, possessions maybe give a great chance to people to have more prosperous life with costly and specific recreation, but it is not the whole story and outcome of it. To see its consequences, we must be aware that we can joy from our lives and be happy, when we are able to communicate with others, especially our friends and family and only if we be in a good mental condition. The people that are rich, cannot sit down and expect to have constant prosper. As far as they are concerned to keep their richness, they must work a lot. Most of them are always in a hurry because of their great number of tasks, as a Persian proverb says, money bring money for people only if they try hard. As a result from such a knowledge, the possession not only brings lack of enough time to spend leisure but also it makes people stressful and nervous, because of the tough work. For instance, my uncle is a computer engineering who is very wealth. He is always working, even during night, when is the time for spending time with family. He used to be extroverted person, but after a while he started to work hard to be rich, he became introverted. He is always busy, so accordingly he can be with us and even with his best friends. In my extended family, he is not at all a happy person. Psychologically speaking, happiness is a mental condition that will increase only if individuals be aware of its required. The most important one is getting along with others in society and family. People need only to make good friendships with others, be a self-director for their mind, I mean don’t allow external factors like lack of money make them sad. My uncle doesn’t consider such an importance in his life.
In summary, by taking all of these into account, I think happiness cannot arise from possession. In fact, it is beyond the price, so that we cannot consider its root in belongings. Family, friendship and comfortable life without stress are among many determining factors for happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ice and discuss the affected factors on individuals happiness. Even though some people are ...
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Line 1, column 286, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'someones'' or 'someone's'?
Suggestion: someones'; someone's
...e people are firmly of the opinion that someones happiness is interwoven to her or his p...
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Line 5, column 1141, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hard to be rich, he became introverted. He is always busy, so accordingly he can b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i mean, i think, in fact, in summary, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 15.1003584229 285% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 98.0 43.0788530466 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 52.1666666667 186% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3422.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 736.0 407.700716846 181% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64945652174 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.20858137428 4.48103885553 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66455148075 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 327.0 212.727598566 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444293478261 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1068.3 618.680645161 173% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 3.51792114695 370% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1164374134 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.696969697 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.303030303 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78787878788 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167412299242 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446160261914 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476596765291 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967614693963 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640354292047 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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