Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People would be happier with fewer possessions.
Today many people try to present a unique definition for happiness. One of the most important indexes of happiness is money. Although some may believe that rich people may struggle with a variety of challenges and are unhappy, I personally disagree with this notion, and I think there is a direct relationship between richness and happiness for a couple of reasons.
First and foremost, lack of money would prevent people from using many facilities in life and make life harder for them. For example, with a significant increase in tuition fee for some private schools, which offer a great combination of educational facilities to students such as experienced teachers, brand new computers and ..., only children who are from rich families are able to go to such schools. As a result, these children are by far happier than children who are obligated to attend schools with low educational facilities, or even children who are suspended from education due to poor families. Furthermore, there are many emergency situations that people only can handle with money. For example, while a serious sickness, people may need to do a quick surgery which is expensive in today's life. Thus, people with enough money are able to pass this hard situation, causing happiness.
Moreover, rich people are able to have a variety of fun activities. Today, due to the increase in many fun activities expenses, it is hard for poor people to have fun with their family and friends. For example, people who have economical welfare can have many fun and amusement activities, such as traveling a lot and having parties with friends which make them happier people. Besides, children with a rich background are able to attend many fun classes, like sports classes, which enhance their mental health during their most important period of life. It is easy to mentally compare two children, one who has spent his/her time with different fun activities, and the other a child who has always been suspended from even initial goods for life, to understand my point.
To sum up, I strongly believe, although money is not everything, it brings about happiness, not only by providing people and their children with a variety of facilities in life which makes life easier and happier but also by providing many fun situations for them which causes happiness.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, i think, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04922279793 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64819181644 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502590673575 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.7647235416 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.933333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186777843247 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762419991667 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402092063616 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126556526104 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265682370286 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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