Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People would be happier with fewer possessions.
Throughout history, one of the most challenging questions in human life has been whether money is the key to human happiness. And do people need money for happiness and satisfaction? Some believe that wealth and possessions are the foundation of happiness, and that the rich always feel happy, while others believe that money does not guarantee happiness, and that they are less likely to own property. We will be happier. Personally, I agree with the second group. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will pinpoint my most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to note is that our world is losing itself in consumeristic pursuits. Home sizes are growing, but happiness is not. We chase paychecks rather than influence and success rather than significance. The results of these choices have proven detrimental: stress, anxiety, fatigue, and regret. We need new inspiration. We need more people rejecting consumerism and choosing life instead. We receive only one life to live with a limited number of days and a limited number of resources with which to accomplish our purpose. In fact, a recent study conducted by Northwestern University demonstrates that people who place greater value on wealth, status, and material possessions have a higher chance of becoming depressed or antisocial.
Another noteworthy point that confirms this view is that having less is a better way to have more space for our full life. Our lives require space. But in today's fast-paced world, it is getting harder and harder to find time to reflect. Having fewer possessions means less cleaning, less reorganization, less repair, and less financial burden. It frees up space, a space that can be spent exploring life to make sure we are living it to the fullest. For example, the rich cannot stop themselves from managing their companies and make sure the money does not go down. That way, they may wake up in the middle of the night to check their stock while others sleep well. How can he be happy if he does not have time with his family instead of thinking about financial problems, even if they just cannot have a good night's sleep?
In the final analysis, by taking all of these into account, I think happiness cannot arise from possession. In fact, it is beyond the price, so that we cannot consider its root in belongings. Family, friendship, and comfortable life without stress are among many determining factors for happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'possessions'' or 'possession's'?
Suggestion: possessions'; possession's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01985111663 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73566645769 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583126550868 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4332034163 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.92 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.12 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131037827558 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347591944446 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549226407313 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727217692982 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505012697341 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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