Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People would be happier with fewer possessions.
In the modern era, being happy and having mental health is difficult because life is more complex than every other time. A controversial question here is whether happiness in the world related to somebody’s possessions or not. I totally believe that people with more possessions have more satisfaction; so, people with less money are not as happy as wealthy ones. My reasons to support my idea are discussed in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, humans try to increase their possessions because this enhances their fulfillment. For more clarification, someone goes to work and struggle to achieve money in order to buy his/her accessories, house, car or any other things. This amount of endeavors is just for boosting their possessions and well-being. For example, suppose a man who does not have a house; therefore, he has rented an apartment, and all days is worry about expenditures and renting. Due to the lack of amenity and wealth, he is not joyful. Conversely, wealthy people that have a fancy lifestyle and can purchase worthy things, have more peace and enjoyment in their life. In other words, the more money and value we earn in our living, the more positive sense we feel.
Secondly, possessions attract others attention and this let individuals to gain more value and success. We as a human live in a society that is constituted by different persons; therefore, the level of our prosperity and happiness are significantly correlated with others behaviors and decisions. Accordingly, how much other parts of society pay attention to us and help us, we can progress. For example, during my childhood, my friend, Mina, who her father was a businessman with a massive amount of money and possessions, was a star in our class because all my classmates care about her more than normal. Not only did the students help her in various courses such as math and science, but also all girls compare themselves with her and like her hugely. As a result, she was always like a brilliant diamond in the class that smiled more than an impoverished girl.
To sum up, fewer possessions do not let people to feel happiness because negative things and events encompassed them. So, the flourishing and fulfillment of somebody is remarkably depended on her/his achievements. We all know that it is not good news about a human being, but unfortunately the essence of a human is like this. Good news is that we can control it by different strategies in order to be happy in all circumstances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n order to be happy in all circumstances
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, conversely, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, such as, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80285035629 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77130279107 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510688836105 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 421.0 20.1344086022 2091% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2022.0 100.406767564 2014% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 421.0 20.6045352989 2043% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 146.0 5.45110844103 2678% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148910110257 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148910110257 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101064135074 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534984775273 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 211.7 11.7677419355 1799% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -355.84 58.1214874552 -612% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 167.5 10.1575268817 1649% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.04 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 27.78 8.01818996416 346% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 10.002688172 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 170.4 10.0537634409 1695% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 10.247311828 273% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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