It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
There is no denying the fact nowadays, the majority of people are seeking to become successful individuals. With this in mind, I, personally, believe that achieving success is not the most significant thing, and people should try to be satisfied and optimistic, even after defeats. I feel this way for two main reasons on which I will elaborate in the following essay.
First, being obssessed of achieving success will be detrimental to human beings' health. Without a shadow of a doubt, health is the greatest wealth of human beings, and nothing is more important than a healthy body and mind. In addition, It is axiomatic that life constitutes of failures and success. To be sure, if people expect themselves to achieve their goals and succeed constanly, they impose a huge amount of stress to themselves. Needless to say, how much stress is harmful to human beings' overall health. Indeed, people obssessed with gaining success will face many physical and mental diseases sooner or later. On the other hand, if people just try to remain happy and satified from the outcomes of their actions, they can maintain their valuable asset, health.
Second, optimistic and delighted individuals learn from their failures and make themselves ready for future achievements and success. Undoubtedly, all individuals, even the most successful ones, have experienced failures in their lives. Indeed, people cannot succeed if they do not experience failures. In fact, the difference between successful individuals and others is the actions after each defeat. To be more specific, successful and optimistic individuals learn from their failures and try to recongnize their mistakes and weaknesses, and they will never repeat their wrong deed. Therefore, this will bring the future prosperity to them. In contrast, people believing that achieving success is everything when face failures, give up. In other words , these people take the chances of future prosperity from themselves. As a result, it is evident that remaining happy is more important than achieving success.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the most critical thing for individuals is staying happy all the time, and gaining success is not vital. This is because not only will remaining happy in all situations help individuals be more healthy, but also this will provide the opportunity for individuals to achieve future success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'remain'
Suggestion: remain
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27559055118 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76659340866 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517060367454 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.081145315 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7142857143 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09523809524 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201649520604 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652850837876 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636300224994 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126950411685 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284008184712 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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